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Review Detail of Ullyr in White Online

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Ullyr
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Alekzi asked me to leave a review as a fellow author and as the editor of this novel, and I will be as truthful as possible. I wanted to read this, as I am a friend to Alekzi, but I couldn't bring myself to do it at first because as an English native, it was difficult for me to deal with the sentence structure. After some chit-chatting, we came to an agreement that I would help him bring the writing up to snuff. It will take a while, but I'll be doing it as fast as I can for his future readers! Daily released chapters will be edited before posting, and I will tackle the former chapters as I can (: As for the story itself, I regret not reading this sooner! Even if there are issues with the grammar, Alekzi has had experience from writing many books before this, and he has truly mastered the art of captivation! The plot of the novel up to current is well thought out, the outline of current and future novel events is meticulously drawn out, and 'almost' every chapter has just enough entertainment to keep you hooked! Isaac is an intelligent (Not a super genius) character who almost completely lacks prior experience in MMO or VRMMO settings. He doesn't just automatically start as the best in the world as is seen in so many other VRMMO novels, and is actually somewhat outclassed in the earlier chapters. As White Online isn't set up like any VRMMO that was released previously in this world, his intelligence and lack of video game experience actually assist him in climbing his way up the ranks from the bottom of the barrell! I have enjoyed my read, and I hope that my work in raising the quality of this novel helps many others enjoy their read as well!

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Trim_2cool
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What chapters have you edited up to? I noticed a drastic drop in quality at chapter 15, so I'm assuming its there.

Ullyr
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Yeah, I only did it for a short stint. The first 14 chapters and then 15 or so chapters in the 270ish area while they were daily releases. It was a lot more work than I had thought it to be. The rest of the review still stands, ofc. Alekzi is a great storyteller, but it's quite noticeable that English isn't his primary language.

Trim_2cool:What chapters have you edited up to? I noticed a drastic drop in quality at chapter 15, so I'm assuming its there.
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