Review Detail of GR15AKLE in The Author's POV

Proper review time. The Author's POV is very reminiscent of "The Novel's Extra," and in a good way. Its also a really nice read, despite the flaws, or at least what I think are flaws, that I will note. Here's a summary. The MC, Ren Dover, is a MC who reincarnated into his 3rd story, which he hasn't finished. That's probably so MC won't stay as a mob forever. Anyway, in his past life he was orphaned at 14 or so years old. He had enough money for school to survive until graduation, but after that for post secondary? No bueno. Spanish. So he went along and applied for a scholarship, of which there was only one available. However, some rich kids dad ending up snatching it. Here he gets his sort of personal quote, "Efforts never reward." Of course, that's not really true, but whatever. Anyway he does some part time jobs, working part time jobs, until he was too weak to stand 10+ minutes, then he became a novelist. He makes money off that, does it again, works again, then he does it again, but oh no. Now he's overweight, no longer writing what he wants to, and taking too many medications then can be good for him. I'm a little confused why he got overweight, but again, whatever. He dies. Sad. Anyway, he takes over some kids body, who actually has a family, that's probably gonna be part of the story later. Also gets a system, but the only thing he can do is see his attributes and such. He's also in a very renowned school, known only as "the lock." Lowercase. But what's this? Potential, D? Student rank, 1750 out of 2000 or so? Again, no bueno. So he goes and gets some cheats the protagonist doesn't need, a swordsmanship manual, and also a potential limiter remover. The protagonist, Kevin, doesn't need the manual since there's like 3 he could've chosen from, and didn't choose the one MC chose. He doesn't need that potential thing, since he has SSS potential. Maybe there's a ranking above that, but who knows. Not me. He gets some cheats, goes to school, and so far, is lying low, save for showing his prowess to exclusively girls. That parts kinda annoying. But oh well. I only hope it wont go the same way as "The Novel's Extra," where he fucking somehow unknowingly makes a pseudo child with another girl. Anyway, some problems I had. A lot of these might just be problems I personally had. Oh well. His mentality. Like, he's 30 years old, yet he can't help but get excited at the sight of these "beautiful" 16 year old's, not to mention his teacher, who's like a sex witch or something. Its explained away that since he has a 16 year old body, he gets hormones and stuff, but you could at least try to control it. It also gets oddly specific in some parts, like the author finding the need to specifically say the MC has a hard one the first time he looked at the teacher. Something else is that he seems to never be serious. Not getting that scholarship seems to be the only problem he went through, because he lacks grit in a sense. Dude goes to a black market at some point in the story, which how the hell does that even exist. Probably the same thing as Mexico's cartels. They only get as big as the Government allows them. Anyway I digress. Dude goes into a black market. Then he goes into a dungeon. As he goes in, he seems to lack any sort of caution. This is immediately shown by him trying a trick that summons 20 or so goblins at once. He doesn't even try to get a feel for them beforehand. If he was 20 years old, normal, and all that, its totally fine. This dude is a 30 years old orphan though. He sometimes acts like he's never even heard of the bad part of the world. However, sometimes, when MC is in a pickle, he gets a lot of grit. Examples? Climbing down a rope in the dark, for 4 freaking days. Another example? On the brink of death, his bones shattered and everything, he manages to spot an opening and kill his enemy. Both of these are before he gets experience with dealing with pain. At least the ones mentioned. The comedy is also kinda weird. As far as I remember, the comedy is basically just the MC getting beat down, or told down by girls. One in particular that irks me is "Melissa." He gives her help with research in exchange for potions, yet the bitch still treats him like a dog. Stuff like (paraphrasing) "Shut the fuck up, or you're trying my new potion." He never tries to fight back either. I don't know if he's got a thing for getting stepped on, because he never seems to ask for respect. It's not like his supply won't get cut off either. So far, he only gave the first half. He holds leverage over her, but never uses it. Maybe that's something some people like. but I personally don't. Also, he ends up in class A-25. Just so happens to be the class the story MC wrote revolves around. What are the chances. These kids are in freaking top 100 in terms of ranking. MC? 1750. Maybe that's just destiny. By the way, going off of the bottom ranking, it seems there's only 2000 or so students. Maybe it's just me, but considering the size of "the lock," its rather low, at least I feel that way. Anyway, that's most of my problems. Onto the good of the story. There's a lot of good. The writing quality is very good. There's, as far as I can tell(I'm no professional) and remember, no errors. It's also very smooth. There's not a lot to say since its basically perfect. There's no lack of updates, which to be honest, is expected, considering Author's in a competition as of now. Story Development. The story part does feel a little lacking as of now, but I suspect that's due to the fact that the stories still young. Some fight scenes are also kinda lacking, or so I feel. So far, its more telling then showing. I mentioned earlier about MC fighting a goblin horde without any experience. The only real parts described were the beginning, and the end. Fight scenes also feel kinda uncreative, that may just be due to the MC's style of fighting, which is one shot kill. I guess it doesn't really leave a lot to describe. Character Design. So far, we only really know the MC. The only thing we know about other characters, is what they're described as. Things like, they act really rough, but are kind at heart. Also, male characters in general, seem very 2 dimensional. They are either arrogant, or cold. Not to mention villains. At least so far, they're also very arrogant, and also have no sort of likeability. I guess its because they are villains. However, in the future, them having some sort of other side, some sort of actually acceptable reason to do this, would be nice. Of course, we know that Melissa's a fucking bitch, but that's besides the point. The reason side characters aren't really fleshed out could be due to the fact that A), MC is a loner, and B), the stories young. Speaking of MC, so far, said MC seems to be improving. Its mentioned, after the bone shattering I wrote about earlier, that he changed from a "tourist" to (paraphrasing cuz I don't remember) "Someone who knows what they're doing." I didn't really notice any actual change. Something else to note, MC doesn't seem to have any sort of trauma, be it from seeing people dead, being alone in the dark, getting injured, you name it. World Background. There's not a lot, but what's described is pretty good. Once again, the story's not old enough to judge this accurately, or so I feel. However, there is one thing, but this is just something I found interesting. In the novel, there's something called an "Air Train." It floats in the air, how high I don't know, and are aerodynamic(which just seems like a given). They can go up to 600 km/h. Sound familiar? Its basically the same as a Maglev. Maglevs float slightly in the air, are aerodynamic, and... China recently built a new Maglev, capable of reaching 600 km/h. The novels like 3 decades into the future by the way. Maybe it flies or something though. I don't know. Anyway yeah, that's about it.