Review Detail of amaturewriter in A Chance To Become An Adonis

I read this and all I can say is the MC isnt developed. He is supposed to be a grown man that was killed by his lover and got a second chance. but instead he acts like a kid, and not some *****. He seems more like a pre****. no hint of maturity. And theres no proper planning of what to do [ he has his goals of wanting to protect family, thats there ] but the actual execution isnt. this should be explored. He hasnt made any plans on that and rather focuses on his school life. And the MC is a mental retard or atleast denser than a neutron star. 8 yrs of marriage, wife never slept with him and he never got the hint that she didnt even like him, even in his death he said I though u loved me, didnt realise she hated him after she shot him [ what happens in story- unless changed ] And this isnt some **** thing ,,,no they are mature adults and MC dosnt have any mental illness. so he is just stupid. this cant even be passed off as disillusion of a yandere lover cause if she disliked the MC this much why the fk wouldnt u not notice? for 8 yrs? does not make sense. suggestion.. instead of focusing on the the social life, etc focus on the MC himself and his actual planning and execution and use of future knowledge to do things and show this. the planning, execution, process, etc. And try to mature the MC. he honestly feels like some pre t.een rather than an *****. the face slapping moments and him feeling better than kids all way younger than him makes more apparent. I read this couple months ago here...same author? **: that story had a pretty stupid moment where no one recognized him after he cut his hair. and it was soo exaggerated and focused on. the couple chps after the hair cut were all about the people not realizing its him or chicks getting wet over him. so forced. Hair cuts change people , definitely agree....but to this extent where the mother, father and brother dosnt realize? so stupid [ and this is why I remember this bk and am asking whether u are the same author, if u are, do avoid this moment ] - *