Review Detail of Sun23 in OUR FLAME: ALWAYS AND FOREVER

The story starts of with an interesting hook, creating a mysterious riddle to be solve. I don't want to spoil anyone, so I'll minimize the amount of details from the story. But in regard, to the mysterious riddle I'm talking about, one should look at the end of the prologue. I assume that the author is trying to say something regarding this character dead. When I was reading the story, I felt that the writing quality can be improve. There were a few commas that I found to be place in the wrong place or does not need commas at all. Aside from that, transitions-wise, and spelling looks good. As for the reason why I gave four stars to characters design, and world background is that there's not a lot details regarding these topics. First, for character design, Even thought the author did gave out some details regarding how the main character Kaylee look like, I feel like it was a bit lacking. But I'll say that for Jazz, her action and the way she talk made me think of Regina from Mean Girls. And for others characters so far, I know that it might take up a bit more time for the author to get to the plot, if she try to describe every characters. But I think the author should, for those characters that are essential to the story. However, one thing that I would say about the emotions presented in the story is that it is very good! Great descriptions! As for world background, I didn't know that it was going to be a werewolf plus modern setting until chapter 2 title. I think it would be good for the author to at least, somewhere in Chapter one explain a bit about the the werewolf world for those reader that are new to the genre. In overall, good story! And for the author: You are doing great! Happy writing!