I would like that too :')

So far so good, interesting characters, interesting world/setting, cool introduction scene. The updates are quite frequent so that doesn't seem to be a problem either!

I've done some work on the chapter, but I noticed as I entered the chapter like a new one, some comments were deleted! Sorry about that!

Haha yeah don’t worry, I’m using what you’re saying as a guiding light more than a gospel - even if I don’t see everything your way, I can figure out the root of what’s causing the issue in most cases and I can try to either polish the initial idea I had so it comes across properly or just redo the idea so the purpose of what I wanted is kept, I won’t just copy and paste what you wrote but it’s super helpful to understand where it comes from so I can treat at the source ! I’ll look forward to your next thoughts!

Thanks a lot for taking the time to read, take notes and formulate a clear and understandable feedback that focuses on how to improve what’s been done ! I expected the first feedback to be less coherent but I’m surprisingly pleased ! I did write this first some time ago, had it alpha read by a published author and kind of only relied on that first alpha read ! I’ll be honest, from what you’ve said clearly some things were missed, I understand and agree with a lot of what you’re saying and the examples you’ve made help visualize how you see it could be improved ! I’ll be working on those tips, and I’ll try to hit most of those targets so this chapter reads properly ! If there’s any more you haven’t added because of space, or anything relating to the next chapters or the ones not out yet feel free to add “durarararararararararararararara” on discord, otherwise my server or email should be on my profile! Once again, thanks for taking the time and hopefully once it’s been improved it’ll help the reader get into the story properly :)

Nice ! Let me know what you think :)

Oh no, more than one girl will like him but he will only end up with one :)

It won't be a proper 'Collect them all' harem. It's more like a love triangle situation, or a love polygon ! There might be new female characters in the future but it won't follow the typical harem trope ! :)

Yes there is :). Even though the main focus won't be romance, there will be some happening

LOL

I can see why the first chapter could make people uncertain about continuing the novel. First chapter is a little awkward in the way it's done, but after that, it's pretty good, enough that you forget that first chapter. I feel like the pace is good and that it's interesting enough to keep reading. If I had one thing to improve, it would probably be the dialogue, but since I'm reviewing this early on, it's probably already fixed. Chapter one and chapter two is day and night, so chapter 70+ should be even better.

I am glad you liked it !!

Thanks a lot :)

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What an interesting turn !

Everlasting Nightmare is an interesting read. You are introduced to interesting characters, allied or enemy. They don't feel empty or void of personality, and they fit well into the novel. The world we're thrown in so far is quite interesting, with its magic quite well designed. The way it's written is also quite masterful. The description are vivid and you feel as if you're on the scene. Some sentences really left me speechless, as they really grasped the scene and painted a clear picture, while keeping us immersed. Tension is well exploited, and leaves me wanting more, hopefully to get some of my questions answered. So far, I enjoy this novel :).

Thanks for taking this comment virginity :)

gives me Bridge to terabithia vibes, im not rdy