Always enjoy action pack stories and this episode was full of it. The scenes were pretty descriptive and easy to follow, also having the villain defeat the hero in combat makes for a great build up for future fights between these two. Even if he was stopped by the special forces officers, I'd say razorblade still came out on top in that exchange.

While only two chapters long so far, the premise is super interesting and very intriguing. An older brother trying to protect his younger sister in a cruel, merciless world. We also get some background on the male mc that brings depth to the character and the world. If there is some advice I could give you is the same I received myself when I started, keep it past tense. You swap between past and present, but keeping it past tense will improve the readers experience and you'll see your writing style improve in an instant. Keep up the good work author, your story has a very interesting start with a lot of potential.

Thank you for detailed analysis, I appreciate it a lot!

At he least he can he say he's special forces now if somebody asks.

But who could take on such a monster?

Weird castles growing inside the Deadlands...

Another slip from me, thanks for the correction.

He definitely seems to be up to something.

Excellent introduction to the world, characters and its concepts from the very beginning. Every chapter is well paced and doesn't waste in taking your attention with how well written. Would definitely recommend to anyone looking for a good fantasy medieval story.

It's honestly a good start. I didn't really feel like it was slow paced or confusing.

Thanks! I wonder what theories you came up with-- who knows, you might've cracked the code.

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Thank you for the review, happy to hear you enjoyed it!

An excellent read with great pacing and characters. You have a great writing style that is just pretty fun to follow, found myself just reading one chapter after the other. The MC is interesting and her story is very intriguing as well. You have something great here, keep it up! [img=strong]

Short, but a good setup for what's to come I'm sure.

Played romance of the three kingdoms not too long ago and this reminds of it a lot. I love settings like this, can already tell I'm going to enjoy this. [img=strong]

It goes into more detail in further episodes, but Cerberus is pretty much a private entity so they are funded by whoever pays for their services (Keep the specters away from me and I'll pay you type of deal).

Thanks, I do try to make them exciting but still easy to follow.

Thank you for the review and the feedback! Always looking to improve on the story more, I appreciate it.

Phew, what can I say? That dark tag is well earned, the story and characters' choices are very intriguing. The twists are well made and leave you wondering what will happen next. Excellent work!