Nice

Shouldn’t he like be more angry that Steven’s life was in danger? That kinda has the same potential for damage as the plague doctor? Or something.

Nice

The only special thing about the mc comes from his system. His personality just seems meh, he is supposed to be smart and low key, but he just comes across as overly cautious and meek to a fault. Idk if it’s just slow build up, but he has been hiding the entire story. The system is what makes the mc do stuff, its what drives the story, without it, the mc would still just be some cowardly hollow following his sister around, if he even became a hollow. All I’m saying is he doesn’t seem to do anything other than what the system tells him, or makes him do. And he doesn’t seem to have any cool/strong/positive qualities that wasn’t given to him by his system. He doesn’t seem to enjoy fighting, he doesn’t seem to want to do anything special? He is just there being strung along by his system and somehow everything just works out? Plot armor shouldn’t be the major reason for his continued survival. The story is good I enjoy reading it, but maybe you could make the mc more of a person, because he seems pretty hollow to me.

Stupid.

This guy just does what he wants with the story. Boring and totally unnecessary filler.

If I’m being honest, I think mc lack the, “throw myself at the enemy and either survive and become stronger or die trying.” Aspect that Bleach are so known for.

I like the interactions, the mc get some more personality in with the ladies around.

Pls make the mc cooler.

The mc is truly pathetic, I understand his perspective. But if you want people to actually find the mc likable he needs to be less cowardly and more involved with the actual story. Its a Bleach ff.

You wrote your biography the wrong place loser.

If you haven’t read it, why are you reviewing it retard?

Wow what an asshat.

This story is great, the writing is very similar to the original GOT. And the harem and smut is very satisfying. And for any soy boys saying, “it’s NTR the girls get together.” Are just stupid insecure individuals. One guy gave low ratings screaming NTR without even reading the story. Its a relationship, not king and his loyal concubines, that serve his every need and fight each other. Its family, its connections, and there is zero unfaithfulness in the story. Zero NTR. The girls are barely having fun together but those that do are all in a relationship with the mc. There is literally zero cheating involved. They are one big relationship, and if you considers two people in a relationship having fun together is NTR, then I suggest you check up on the definition. If you want a semi realistic harem with an wholesome feeling to it, this is it. Plus the smut is very well written, honestly excellent. Don’t believe the other asshat reweivs. I truly don’t believe they have any romantic experience or could handle a ordinary relationship. If you’re a fan of GOT, harems and smut. This story is for you. And again zero NTR, and I fucking hate NTR, even yuri NTR. But there isn’t any cheating in this story, and even if the girl have a little fun together, it is all inside the relationships the mc started.

I personally am not a fan of your other story, but that’s just me. But I really like this one, it tickles me fancy. So don’t be too let down, as there are a lot of people interested in what new things you write.

But great ch. good you’re still going strong.

Not the cliffhanger, we all like to see the arrogant division commander put the scum in their place. Pretty good at hyping it up.

Makes zero sense, any merchant would’ve never refuse to sell something to a shinobi. The interactions between mc and other people are extremely bad and just seems out of place in the Naruto world. Go write a Bleach ff or something seem more up the authors ally, there he can use his modern mindset and total disregard for power scaling or understanding of the abilities used.

Bro learn English or get a prof reader, this is getting embarrassing.

This story is straight up brain rot, it’s well written enough to come of as decent. But are so inconsistent and full of small weird things that shouldn’t be in the Naruto verse. The author seems to just make his own explanation for jutsu and everything in the story is just right for the mc. So unrealistic, like some Chinese ff was rewritten to better fit in his own weird au Naruto verse.