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So let's get straight to shit. Brother no offence but what is this overly dramatic things like unwavering determination , willpower bro write it in a more casual way. Like resiously while flirting girls are saying yours so determined and I am amazed with your unwavering determination. Make world like it is the theme and everythung is good just make the characters more life like I will recommend once reading The Heroines can hear my inner voice its storyline amd system are very similiar to yours and you may get some inspiration . It will help you I u Der standing true human behaviour instead of overly dramatic and unrealistic scenes. And if you want to thank me just add me on insta I think we could be great friends , the things popping in your mind are very similar to mine 😉😉😏
Brother I like the novel but what I think personally could change the whole novel and bring about a Cyclonic change.... It would be that the Mc needs to experience true ego. Ego is not about only scoring goals or doing whatever you want. True ego is Pride at its epitome but lower than over confidence. It is the true Awakening of a monster a dragon ready to conquer the world. The Mc needs a reality check. Give him him experience card of a true egoist which allows him to view the world from their perspective and becoming A true Egoist. ahahhaajahahahaha 😈😈😈😈and also maybe some romance with the manager of this whole project who is the fan favourite Anri Teiri would be nice . you could start with the Mc getting a massage from her and then 😏 you already know what to do So good luck TRUE EGOIST
Thanks for the chapter Great novel innovative ideas I don't have enough words to describe it but it's a wonderful piece of art. I also wanted to give a suggestion if you don't mind.As you say you're planning on him introducing songs and other items from our world so you could add a system which would reward him for significant achievements.
bro great novel just increase the number of chapters you upload and one more thing brother I think you should right now focus on only about 2 to 3 novels amd fully grow them because you know bY dividing your attention in so mamy novels. Your quality in later stages could degrade. Special Request If you take my request make sure to keep this movel on the list of the novels you stick upload pleasee Goodbye take care and once more Great job amd may you find succes in future endeavours
Brother keep the great work up. Excellent novel with good character building,infinite potential. The I one thing I wanna advice you is to just add a bit of romance in it just some flirting. Thats it and you would have an absolute masterpiece. Well this also is already a masterpiece but still a little more spice never spins the dish. Good luck in your future endeavours 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
Bhaiya the story is great, the character development, background story and it's connection to our culture is mind blowing. I loved the story but I wouldn't be able to read it now as I don't come from a very well off family. So I thought I should motivate on the last chapter I am going to read.pleaee don't think I got bored of the story it's just that I can't read it now as I just used my last freepass on this chapter. You are doing a great job keep it up bhaiya!