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It was interesting at the beginning (I read up to chapter 9) it's a shame that a lot of things started to happen off-screen, for example: Naruto improving because of the protagonist (it didn't show) Hinata stopping being shy and becoming strong (it was just a comment, it didn't show the process of change) If there were more dialogues/character details as mentioned above it would be much better
I was researching SCP 169 on YouTube and I found something interesting about it, apparently there is a group of islands in the ocean that shake every three months, after the foundation evacuated people from the island and studied for some time, they found a theory that this tremor that happens every three months is SCP 169 Breathing. (I just thought it was an interesting detail, putting some details like that in the story would be really cool)
So, I dropped the book and went looking for another one about SCP (since I found the concept very interesting, since I didn't know much about SCP) and oddly enough, I only found one that was much worse than this one, so I decided to read it again and... the translation improves a little (the chatgpt descriptions decrease a little) so just ignore this strange way of narration that sometimes happens (in the current chapters I decreased it a lot) Overall, it's worth continuing to read even if the narration can sometimes be a little strange.
until chapter 30 (more or less) it was very good, then the translation was horrible with chatgpt describing half of the chapters in detail an example: ricci - I think the guard of site 001 needs to be increased' says ricci with a dark melancholy and a touch of weight in his words, like the shadow of the night seeking to protect the light of the world' it would be like the example above after chapter 30, a lot of exaggerated description because of chatgpt, which is incredibly sad considering that the work was very good to read.
man, I'm saying that it doesn't make sense that she already likes him seeing how the previous Peter acted, and there wasn't much time in this body for her to already like the current and confident him (you know what I mean?) the flash part I thought was forced because it's really stupid for him to try to kill someone the way it was done in this story, and the beggar's part meant that his past hatred towards the company that the prota is going after was very "convenient". I hope you understand what I meant now.
I'm writing through the translator because I don't know English, the first 8/9 chapters were good, the development with Michele, the dialogues, everything was incredible, but out of nowhere it went downhill with his aunt starting to like him out of nowhere, fantasizing about him and etc. I was very disappointed but I still continued, then the flash tries to kill him, but I continued, and soon after a beggar saves him and we discover that the beggar has a history with oscorp and so on. In conclusion, it started well and became just another fiction without logical development (the first 8 chapters were on the way, a shame they were lost)
I thought the story would be him creating a village and then some homunculi like Fate's to help him keep everything going (I thought about it because of the knowledge he gains, so I thought he was going to go that way) and then him making non-aggression/trade pacts with other villages, meeting characters and getting stronger and etc. But instead, the work is him collecting characters like Pokémon for his village and that's it, it's basically a slice of life of a very strong guy (he's literally enel lol) picking up characters for his village, that's all, it had a lot of potential, but it went down a very boring path.
He said literally a few paragraphs ago that he could see well in the dark because of the white tiger gene. (The author forgot was it?)
(I'm currently on Chapter 26) The story in general is good, I can see where the author picked up some ideas, such as the power of Prota that reminds me a lot of Deadpool, and the part that talks about 100% brain capacity and etc (from the movie Lucy), the work is good but there are some things that bother me, like the dump of information, That doesn't even seem like it's Prota explaining, but the author (you know what I mean?) Other than that, I'm not in the mood to continue also because of the teacher, who in the chapter I'm in (26) is annoying again bro, I wanted to know if she will continue to boss him around for a long time, because it's obvious that (unfortunately) she's a romantic couple, which I don't like seeing her personality anymore, besides that until Prota gets stronger she has ground and if she keeps bossing him around (and getting blood by the way) for a long time I won't even continue this work, Because this really annoys, it's enough for Prota to have to basically 'get beaten' to get strong, now she complicates it to complete this
I was thinking of reading it, but as it doesn't have a rating I went to look at the most recent chapters and saw that she just found out what curses are and met Gojo (which is very much), from what I read it is well written and the system seems interesting (I read the last two chapters released). But having to wait 50 chapters for her to learn about curses is complicated, I still liked the proposal and also as I said it's well written, so I'll wait to put together about 100 chapters before I start reading.-. Note: I wrote this reading only chapter 46 and 47, so I didn't read the whole trajectory, but I managed to have a basic idea of the writing and interaction of the characters, and that it took 50 chapter basically to learn what a curse is, that is, the story seems to be a little slow in this regard, and JJK would be the main theme (seeing by the power of the story and the title of the book)
I didn't understand the part of the third Kazekage you said, and I don't even want to go to the chapter to read it, but the part of the 'nerf' you said is explained later, that Tenseigan himself limits him from exercising all his power, because the current He can't stand it, so Tenseigan limited him in a way to self-preserve, Like when the body goes into a state of 'weakness' to limit the energy it spends, the more over time its body gets used to it and it becomes With the full power of Tenseigan, don't worry about it, and this story only gets better going forward, you should really keep going.
Basicamente uma história com pensamento interno do personagem principal, quase não tem diálogos de personagens, fora que tem muitos detalhes desnecessários que ocupam quase o capítulo todo, um exemplo é o protagonista contando sobre mitologia para o Itachi, ocupa quase 2 capítulos inteiros só de mitologia, outro exemplo é o protagonista depois do timeskip que Aprendi ninjutsu médico e ocupa um monte de palavras dele explicando sobre os ossos do corpo e etc. Seria uma boa história se tivesse menos monólogos internos do MC, mais diálogos com outros personagens e menos detalhes desnecessários.
(currently in chapter 63) I'm commenting here to vent something that has bothered me a lot in this story, it started first in the arc of the Zenin tournament, that the fight was very I MEAN 'VERY LONG', then comes another thing that bothers me, which was the fight with the curse of the snow, and the subsequent fights as well, which apart from them being very long, Which by the way if they were well written would be no problem, but they are very annoying to read, for example: The descriptions of the fights after the Torneip Zenin are like this - 'Mute throws a kick while dodging the curse punch, right after mute launches an attack with his line while mute dodges the curse cut, mute takes space from the curse while mute launches a long-range attack with his chain' the protagonist's name is mentioned all the time, and believe it or not this bothers a LOT, because it takes away all the immersion of the fight, besides that there are many and I mean MANY DETAILS OF THE FIGHTS.
(I read until chapter 32) When I started reading, I had thought that the story was going to take a different path than it really is, so I almost dropped it, but then I decided to look at the story in a different way, I saw her as a villainous protagonist who would do what she wanted without accepting a slap in the face, being that the story is about a callous killer basically, When I looked at the story like that, until the beginning of the sister torturing him and such, it became much more 'acceptable' since it was basically training. So if you're going to read this, look at it as a callous killer in Jujutsu Kaisen looking to get strong enough to kill Gojo, that's the MC's only goal, don't expect him to show a lot of emotions like empathy and etc.
The story is good overall, it's flowing well, the conversations are good and so is the development. Now what I didn't like - first the protagonist, I understand it's the character development and such, but he's very annoying sometimes, I'm not talking about him acting childish or anything like that, an example is when the Uchiha massacre happens, and he blames himself just for knowing about him and not being able to stop it, being that he doesn't know any Uchiha (he knows Sasuke, but not even friendship is enough), I wish he was a little more... 'mature' so to speak, because he is very sentimental for someone who spent 9 months in darkness to be born, apart from losing the parents he had accepted in that life, but other than that I really like how the story is going, if the protagonist improves his mental state it will get even better, because the way it is now I am sure he will be all dramatic for about 10 chapters when he kills for the first time time. and improve the speed of posting chapters please.