I think I fixed the issue. As well working on the additional story after chp11 for more depth that includes the gardener and one new character.

I appreciate your honest feedback, and I'm glad to hear that you're interested in a more fleshed-out story. I'll focus on expanding the world, character relationships, and backstories to create a richer and more engaging narrative. I'll also keep in mind your interest in alternate storylines, as they could provide more depth to the story.

Thank you for your feedback! I appreciate your insight into the 'show, don't tell' aspect of the story. I'll work on incorporating more vivid descriptions of Xander's actions and experiences, as well as the whereabouts and experiences of his family, the gardener, and the maid.

Thank you for pointing out the confusion! To clarify, Xander is technically dead, and Vincent's soul has taken over his body, inheriting some of Xander's memories and aspects of his personality. The story follows Vincent's journey in Xander's body while dealing with his own deeper self, his unconscious and true self that manifests as the evil voice in his head. I'll make sure to clarify this better in the text. Please feel free to share any other feedback or questions you may have!

Yeah, I will apply changes asap. To be honest as a fellow reader I can see your frustration I wouldnt like that too. Thanks for your understanding, and I'll do my best to make the necessary adjustments to create a more enjoyable reading experience. Don't hesitate to share any further thoughts or suggestions you may have. Happy reading! [img=strong]

I will surely add this to my check list ;)

Thank you for your feedback on Chapter 4. I understand your concern about Xander appearing too young in his actions and attitude. As the author, I am always looking for ways to improve. Xander, is showing a lot of curiosity and enthusiasm for learning, which may be perceived as childish by some readers. However, it is important to remember that he is going through a significant change due to the merging of his consciousness with Vincent's. This could lead to Xander displaying new interests and a different attitude. I could incorporate more mature thoughts and actions for Xander, highlighting his growth and the changes he is going through due to the merging of his consciousness with Vincent's. Does that sound reasonable?

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Thank you for your comment, I really need it if you comment on more chapters I would be happy to answer them :)

Yes, I agree, but I also want to make how he was created. As he changes. I think if he is from the begging evil it is not enough as rarely everyone is evil when being born.

Of course! I apologize if the chapter didn't turn out exactly as you envisioned. I'm more than happy to make any adjustments and elaborate further on specific aspects of the story. Please let me know which parts you'd like me to expand upon or revise, and I'll do my best to make the necessary changes. Your feedback is important to ensure the story aligns with your vision.

Sure, I wilk work on a chapters to accomplish that. Stay evil.

Thank you for sharing your perspective! It's certainly possible that Xander's character could develop in that direction. As the novel progresses, Xander will continue to face situations that challenge his moral compass and tempt him to prioritize his own benefits over the well-being of others. The choices he makes and the experiences he goes through could very well shape him into an evil protagonist, driven by self-interest and a relentless pursuit of personal gain. However, it's essential to keep in mind that Xander's character development depends on the decisions he makes, the lessons he learns, and the reader's influence on his journey. With your input and engagement, you could help shape Xander's path towards becoming the evil protagonist you desire to read about. Keep following his story to find out how his character evolves and what choices he makes along the way!

Thank you for your insightful comment! Xander's journey is one of self-discovery and learning to manage the darker aspects of his personality. Throughout the story, we'll see him face numerous challenges and temptations, constantly struggling with the inner turmoil caused by his alter ego. The transformation into a true neutral evil protagonist is an intriguing possibility, as Xander might eventually choose to harness the power of his darker side while maintaining a sense of balance and control. This development depends on the choices he makes, the lessons he learns, and the reader's influence on his journey.