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  • pinfue
    pinfue1yr
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    A really good story and premise. Got me interested right from the beginning. One tiny little gripe I have is that the dialogue in the story has a space before and after each sentence, and it mostly doesn't end in a punctuation. This is just a tiny little problem I faced that doesn't affect the score at all. Overall give this book a try and see if you can vibe with it like I did.

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    Bounded by the shackles of fate
    Fantasy · Missy_Ti
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  • pinfue
    pinfue1yr
    Commented

    foreign prince perhaps?

    But for now, I want you two to keep a close eye on her " he paused as if sensing something " be careful, I feel his presence, he has arrived already and is somewhere around, we wouldn't want him ruining the plan " the dark mist that surrounded him thickened and engulfed him until he vanished.
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    Bounded by the shackles of fate
    Fantasy · Missy_Ti
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  • pinfue
    pinfue1yr
    Commented

    wielder?

    "She's the wilder of the Devine pneuma, her powers will surely surface when she is at the right age, we only have to wait two more years, until then I'd advise we keep a close eye on her. "
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    Bounded by the shackles of fate
    Fantasy · Missy_Ti
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  • pinfue
    pinfue1yr
    Commented

    foreign prince?

    " Crown prince of Ramin's kingdom, 5th prince Fabian Aeropos Athelstan" he introduced himself leaving me in utmost shock, I could only widen my eyes at his revelation.
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    Bounded by the shackles of fate
    Fantasy · Missy_Ti
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  • pinfue
    pinfue1yr
    Commented

    better than himself ig

    " I want to introduce my son to you, who knows maybe you two could get along well and we would have our next dutchess of clan Douglas. " ' as if ' I thought to myself as I almost rolled my eyes.
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    Bounded by the shackles of fate
    Fantasy · Missy_Ti
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  • pinfue
    pinfue1yr
    Commented

    disgusting

    This man was at least thrice my age and must be age mates with the king my father, he was a man with golden blonde hair with shades of Gray and dark brown eyes and a mustache right below his nose that was properly shaved " aeh, I see you don't seem to know me" he grinned as he continued " I am Duke Alphonso Barrett grand Duke of clan Douglas. "
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    Bounded by the shackles of fate
    Fantasy · Missy_Ti
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  • pinfue
    pinfue1yr
    Commented

    siblings in royalty = snakes thatll kill u for the throne

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    Bounded by the shackles of fate
    Fantasy · Missy_Ti
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  • pinfue
    pinfue1yr
    Replied to Novel_Dumre

    could you help me complete the review swap? you've havent done mine yet

    altalt
    The Devil's Accessory
    Fantasy · Novel_Dumre
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    pinfue1yr
    Replied to Novel_Dumre

    can we do a review swap? im the guy on the forum :D

    Ch 1 The Asisstant
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    The Devil's Accessory
    Fantasy · Novel_Dumre
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  • pinfue
    pinfue1yr
    Posted

    very well written. I just have one very small gripe with the paragraphing and the dialogue. Like I said in chapter 1 comments, the dialogue not being its own paragraph just made it harder to read. Other than that, its a good read.

    altalt
    The Devil's Accessory
    Fantasy · Novel_Dumre
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  • pinfue
    pinfue1yr
    Commented

    good first chapter, just that a lot of the sentences feel too clunky, especially the dialogue. I feel if you have a separate paragraph everytime someone speaks it'll look much cleaner. Just my two cents

    Ch 1 The Asisstant
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    The Devil's Accessory
    Fantasy · Novel_Dumre
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  • pinfue
    pinfue1yr
    Posted

    I really enjoyed the book so far. Great characters and the writing is top notch too. One small gripe I have is that it gets a little tedious when there is no clear direction of the plot. But that is just the beginning and it fixes itself slowly. But it is still a good read and you should give it a try

    altalt
    Dark Romance Chronicles: Secrets We Keep
    Urban · MrFay
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  • pinfue
    pinfue1yr
    Commented

    so it means no?

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    Dark Romance Chronicles: Secrets We Keep
    Urban · MrFay
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  • pinfue
    pinfue1yr
    Commented

    slay the dragon rn

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    Dark Romance Chronicles: Secrets We Keep
    Urban · MrFay
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  • pinfue
    pinfue1yr
    Commented

    sounds alot like writing books

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    Dark Romance Chronicles: Secrets We Keep
    Urban · MrFay
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  • pinfue
    pinfue1yr
    Replied to daddysukuna

    facts

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    Dark Romance Chronicles: Secrets We Keep
    Urban · MrFay
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  • pinfue
    pinfue1yr
    Posted

    Very interesting premise and good characters. I don't know why but I find emily so cute and funny. I don't really like reading first person tho, but that's just a personal gripe that doesn't affect the story whatsoever. But if you really dislike first person then you should avoid this book.

    altalt
    Red Blood Century
    Fantasy · RomanceFanatic028
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  • pinfue
    pinfue1yr
    Commented

    burn the forest down immediately

    Ch 5 Unexpected Meeting (2)
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    Red Blood Century
    Fantasy · RomanceFanatic028
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  • pinfue
    pinfue1yr
    Commented

    bruh

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    Red Blood Century
    Fantasy · RomanceFanatic028
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  • pinfue
    pinfue1yr
    Commented

    not happy? :(

    I could sense the sadness in her voice. Looks like she was truly surprised by our return.
    altalt
    Red Blood Century
    Fantasy · RomanceFanatic028
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