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JonPatrickLee25dReplied to Solastius_SeenaGuess I missed the part where it went back in time to high school. I reread but easy to miss the reminiscence
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“Graduate high school”… in the first chapter he’s in college?
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The writing quality isn't the worst I've seen but still could use improvements. The dialogue between some characters feels choppy, almost bullet point-esque. How the world works and the the layout of the economy/culture definitely could be touched upon more. And in the early chapters, a cliché scenario (parents die) happens but there's no real prior connection that we the readers have with them so it's bland, emotionless. It lacks impact. Good potential with plot but poorly executed.
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If it was 2 gold a month, that would make the 15 gold more valuable. Otherwise that's just about 7 days of work
"Looks like fifteen gold, not bad. I could have lived off of this with my parents for some time. They used to bring in twenty silver so about two gold a day. That paid all the bills and then fed us. It would look better if it was in silvers and coppers though. But it's not practical to carry around a hundred copper over ten silver or ten silver over one gold." Clark mumbled to himself as he noticed the random herbs that also came out of the spacial ring. - JonPatrickLee6mthReplied to captainawesome
its mentioned that the egg is cracked and blackened. Which leads me to believe it burned in the fire along with his parents, so unviable.
The gate was simple. It was large and connected to a wall leading up the small mountain where Nova academy lived. The gate was crowded by many of the people dropping potential students off. Since Clark had not arrived in a carriage. Clara and he were not seen as together. It was perfect because everyone looked upon those getting out of carriages or being seen off by bodyguards. - JonPatrickLee6mthCommented
Runs in the family I suppose
Braxton couldn't bring himself to utter a single word as he tried to rein in the fury that threatened to burst out of him. His face gained a purplish red tint as if all the blood in his body had rushed there. - JonPatrickLee6mthCommented
Since when did he know there was a core? Did I miss that convo or is this just implied because of ranks with beasts??
He had no intention of mutilating the corpse of a beast for no reason. The reason for searching the corpse was to take out the core inside its body. Considering the fact that the beast had been a D rank monster, its core could turn out to be quite precious. - JonPatrickLee6mthCommentedA girl in black fitted clothes that only covered her private parts was drenched of c^m with bloodstains. She took a handful of Damon's milk and showed it to him.
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Ehh kinda obvious when he turned into a vampire
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Wouldn’t a horizontal cut be more logical to do that since it’ll split top and bottom instead of right and left?
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Throughout the beginning chapters, something just fundamentally felt off. The story itself has some interesting plot lines and potential but him only being 7 but talking and acting like a grown man and having the confidence with his skills to kill some of the strongest 2% of the cultivators.. just doesn’t feel right. Don’t even ask me to remember the different cultivation levels because my pea brain won’t be able to. For how much it would cost to continue reading, not worth it imo
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Reminds me of my little niece throwing a tantrum about eating veggies😂
"I will not drink blood, no blood, especially not human blood!" Lyle shouted in anger as the system was quiet. - JonPatrickLee7mthPosted
Read through the first 100 chapters and I only continued to read out of boredom. The plot is subpar, most of the MCs interactions seem forced and shallow. When we learned about his painful backstory, I never truly felt emotions, just words on a screen. There just really isn’t a desire to continue reading as I get more frustrated at the MC than anything else.