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Lemore12dCommentedCh 1 Ch-1 A Birth Celebrated By The Universe- Lemore12dCommentedCh 1 Ch-1 A Birth Celebrated By The Universe
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It's not that your writing isn't good. The story is one of the best. It's just that you need to improve your grammar a bit (According to me) Any way thank's for the chappter
Don't forget to share your thoughts on the chapter in the comment section. Also tell me if anything in the chapter needs to be improved, as my precious readers I wouldn't mind if you find any flaws in the chapter, I would just fix them as fast as possible. - Lemore1yrCommented
2) "Y-yeah" (Reya) After that, Reya maintained quite a bit of distance from the stream Instead of writing this, you could have written. "Y-yeah" Reya stuttered and after that, she maintained quite a bit of distance from the stream.
Don't forget to share your thoughts on the chapter in the comment section. Also tell me if anything in the chapter needs to be improved, as my precious readers I wouldn't mind if you find any flaws in the chapter, I would just fix them as fast as possible. - Lemore1yrCommented
There's a flaw in your writing style. 1) "Y-yeah" (Reya) Instead of that you could have written. --] "Y-yeah" Reya stuttered.
Don't forget to share your thoughts on the chapter in the comment section. Also tell me if anything in the chapter needs to be improved, as my precious readers I wouldn't mind if you find any flaws in the chapter, I would just fix them as fast as possible. - Lemore1yrCommented
I do have a suggetion
Don't forget to share your thoughts on the chapter in the comment section. Also tell me if anything in the chapter needs to be improved, as my precious readers I wouldn't mind if you find any flaws in the chapter, I would just fix them as fast as possible.