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Adnan_111dReplied to HeroDuT1998- Adnan_112dPosted
- Adnan_11mthCommented
Dear author, I recall you mentioning in the previous chapter that Magneto would remember this moment in the years to come, kind of like an enemy he would forever fear, allowing you to have an additional character to develop as well as creating a character who can have an interesting relationship. Moreover, I'm not sure if killing off [the character] was necessary for Angel's development. Gilgamesh's wake-up call was sufficient. So, I hope you haven't decided to change your storyline just because some idiots asked you to. Please note this is not a negative critique; I just find it unfortunate to part ways with a character (Magneto) who could have been interesting, but if it's for the good of the storyline, then I have nothing more to say. THANKS FOR THE CHAPTER !!!!
Ch 1 | Chapter 31: A King Among Mortals - Part II | - Adnan_12mthCommentedThis increased the potential for food production by a lot, allowing Selwyn Tarth to import additional population for the development of the northern part of the island. Galladon's goal is to increase the population of Tarth to 1,5 – 2 million people in the next ten years. To achieve this goal a lot of slaves are needed to mine stones and reclaim farmland. Furthermore, he suggested at an elder meeting of House Tarth to build additional granaries and horde food, while grain prices are still low right now.
- Adnan_12mthReplied to Niloy_Das
LOL, I think the author should consider revisiting his chapter. 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣
The magical ability of his aura completely evaded the tragic fate of House Tarth and established his role as the male heir of the family firmly. After building up a close and respectful relationship with his father and mother, he finally confessed them his ability 8 years ago, but chose not to reveal them his knowledge about the possible future, as to not cause large differences to the future he knew. Only a secret known to a single person could be kept a secret for a long time. - Adnan_12mthCommentedCh 16 A Feast
- Adnan_12mthReplied to Uveilazatrum
yep we just wasted time on this
I have no intention of telling readers how they should digest information, nor do I feel that I owe anyone an explanation beyond what is made implicit in the story. - Adnan_12mthReplied to VIP2001
Seriously ?!!
For a few weeks, apart from eating and training with my two swords, I did nothing but try to find that light in me, nothing more, nothing less, I persisted for a long time on this path and finally, after a full month, I felt the indescribable feeling that swelled my heart with joy, seeing that my practice was paying off, I started using meditation every day, and a week later, I was able to "activate" this power as I wished. - Adnan_12mthCommentedCh 60 Kaito chapter 60
- Adnan_12mthCommentedCh 1 | Chapter 23: Aftermath, And Setting Up The Kingdom - Part III |
- Adnan_12mthCommentedCh 4 Horrifying day in the dungeon
- Adnan_12mthReplied to Gilgamesh_OfficialCh 1 | Chapter 17: X-Men? All I See Is Weakness - Part I |
- Adnan_12mthPosted
I'm not a fan of leaving bad reviews, but in this fanfiction, there are too many things that suggest the author has only read or watched a few Naruto episodes or maybe other fanfics. Too many aspects are incorrect (like a 2-year-old creating new fuinjutsu without asking for talent for it and even though that guy might be the talentest talent ever it's a little to much; the portrayal of Hiruzen's character; and the background of the story). I understand that in a fanfic, the author is free to do whatever they want, but there's a limit. Please correct me if I'm wrong, but in this kind of fanfic, what makes it interesting is how the addition of characters changes what we already know, not manipulating the story entirely.
- Adnan_12mthCommented
I think it would be pretty fun and interesting. ( I still hope for a Game of Thrones or House of the Dragon fanfiction where the main character is reborn with the power of the Dovahkiin )
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- Adnan_12mthPosted
I will list the many problems I encountered with this fanfiction, focusing on the redundant points present in the first four chapters. This should be enough to give you an idea of the kind of story it is: 1. Incredibly stupid main character: From the very first sentence, the main character claims that there is a higher chance of finding life forms inland than on the coast, and decides to head inland. (Advice: if you are ever lost, do NOT do what he does!) The funniest thing is that the character is supposed to be an elite former military man. 2. Incoherent reincarnation: If the story takes place in a world where memories of the original world are erased, why choose the concept of reincarnation? And even if we accept it, why is it that ONLY the memories of the original world are erased? This makes the story unbearable to read. (Personally, I'm tired of seeing "Dark Sasuke" everywhere. It's like watching the adventures of a robot, it's boring.) 3. Unexplained information: Some characters seem to have unexplained information. For example, the guild leader of Cait Shelter knows that Wendy and the other dragon slayers are from 400 years ago, without any justification. Even if he knows that the dragons disappeared 400 years ago, there are other more plausible theories than time travel. These kinds of problems are omnipresent in the story. Frankly, I don't understand how it can be ranked so high (maybe because it's one of the few long Fairy Tail fanfictions on this site). That said, my opinion is personal and you are free to make your own.
- Adnan_12mthReplied to DaoOfPlow
I don't think that it's the comportement of a kid
"Aren't you? I lost the fight, and you caught me, so i am your captive now. You won't get anything from me, so it will be better to kill me."-Ben