Do you know the name in English?

I love this novel Can we get another chapter today?

This is great! Thanks for the fanfic. Btw, what's the name of the Raw novel for this fic?

Man, AI sure love to use 'determination' a LOT! Like, unusually so.

Bro, did you sign a Exclusive contract or a Non-executive contract? Can you share a bit about it?

You keep switching from Past to Present tense and it makes the read awkward. It's like reading a bunch of monologues instead of a narration, especially because it's First Person PoV.

The PoV doesn't feel like a story. It just feels like him roing random monologues one after another, trying too hard to sound funny.

He turned Super saiyan at the age of Four. He is not four years old.

When will he stop being so Emo and all.

Also, the tenses are all out of place. He's constantly going from past tense to present tense, messing up the flow.

Write it in 3rd person PoV. This just feels like he's ranting and talking to himself. Who even say's 'Let's stop this flashback session'? This is not how you write in First Person PoV.

To be honest, I wasn't aware of it until recently, but that version was abandoned and there were some potholes that it didn't change and kept the same from the original version, which I obviously wish to ammend.

Maybe it has something to do with the S Cells as well? Goku wasn't a Super Saiyan when Gohan was born, but he had achieved SSJ and had plenty of S Cells when Goten was conceived.

No, since he is a Saiyan Hybrid. Both he and Trunks were born without a tail.

Do this. After you've finished writing, open your note app and copy/paste the chapter you've written there. Then, select the Grammarly keyboard and you'll find that it's giving you suggestions for things you need to change. Just click on that and let it change the words according to it's suggestions and see if that feels better than the original. That help a lot. And if all of that also doesn't help with the grammar, just use AI to correct the chapter grammatically. Also, these kind of novels should be written in 3rd person PoV not the First person. Explaining your actions while doing or performing an act feels a bit weird to read. Doing these will definite improve the overall novel quality. Thanks.

Use a grammar app. It'll help with the reading quality. There are no structure in the sentences or paragraphs, besides the other grammatical mistakes. Using something like Grammarly will help a lot. It's free.

Are you stupid or what? He's not calling Allah 'Yahweh'. Yahweh is a seperate God, the god of the Israelites. Nobody is calling Allah 'Yahweh' so stop crying about it. He literally said 'and the like'. It's simple English, not even that complicated. What are you even on about?

To the Muslim's above. Please try to understand that he's just stating this in general and trying to be inclusive. You don't have to take this personally and make this about yourself. There are other religions as well, apart from Islam, and those religions have their own gods that they believe in. Trying to argue about One True God or whose belief is correct is pointless because everyone is entitled to their own beliefs and you believing/thinking otherwise doesn't change a thing or make other's belief wrong. Also, I just request everybody, regardless of their religion, to please be respectful and inclusive of others and not impose their beliefs on anyone else. Thank You.

He's not writing this for Muslims specifically. He's saying that in general. There are other religions out there as well, you know? Those with other Gods they worship? So stop expecting to him to make it exclusive to your religion and ignoring everybody else's.

This is lazy writing. What do you mean by Gust, Whirlwind, etc? You can atleast state the Pokemon moves can't you?