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DaoistDK95fH2yrPosteda very interesting novel, the concept is cliche but unique at the same time and the protagonist is quite likeable. I've noticed that you don't have an editor and the story also needs a bit of polishing so..m if you are interested hit me up, I'm a newbie at it but I can help polish some chapters for free
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instead of trying to clean up this mess by yourself, why don't you just send me the draft of the current chaps in discord, I'd love to help you do the editing
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no probs, I like reading this novel so Id like to help too😆
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he won't struggle once I make him a hostage* sounds better no?
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used spore* into his hands *plan to use it on the young master of yada yada* I dunno what you mean by that last sentence, but you can rephrase it cause it looks messy af rn
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yo fam, your story's premise is interesting but it lacks polishing, like the writing has so many mistakes I'm not a master of English myself as its my third language, but recently I have an urge to try and dip my toes in editing hit me up if you want a free editor, I can try to minimize the grammar mistakes I can't guarantee the quality doe
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they want the mc to be so edgy that he can cut the pavement when he walks I mean, seriously guys on this platform should chill a bit
That didn't mean I didn't feel any remorse or guilt over taking a life. Yeah, yeah, I was a failure of a villain. So what? As a villain, I didn't care what other people thought of me. I was going to do what I wanted. And yeah, I saw all those comments on the forums from edgelords. "I want completely evil main characters with no bottom line." "I want ruthless and cold-hearted main characters who kill without remorse." "I want evil main characters without any morals, who will kill anyone in their way." "He should be a loner and not love anyone." - DaoistDK95fH2yrCommented
now that's how I like my cultivation mc, those idiots with system or other cheats have it easy but without them they would just be cannon fodder but our mc here uses hard work and perseverance to improve and not some shady bs pill or heaven earth whatnot treasure
Money wasn't important to me. I didn't really have to rely on spirit stones or so-called cultivation resources to grow stronger. I only needed hard work, perseverance and effort. There was nothing I could buy that would surpass Heaven and Earth Formula in terms of helping me improve my cultivation level. This wasn't some fictional cultivation story where I had to ascribe to some never-ending capitalistic system of hoarding, earning money, spending and buying, consuming stuff or refining elixirs or whatever to grow stronger. I was going to achieve it the old fashioned way – by training! - DaoistDK95fH2yrCommented
yea, the hero party also seems like a typical isekai adventurer party of the mc
"Stay still," she warned me, already conducting the healing techniques that White Herb Sect was so famous for. She really was a priestess, huh? Sometimes I felt as if she was in the wrong story. I wondered if she should belong instead to a western medieval fantasy isekai (another world). I could almost imagine it now. There was a cute girl in the hero party, so I tried to confess to her. - DaoistDK95fH2yrCommented
GETSUGA TENSHOU!
"Lunar Fang Splits the Heaven!" I shouted, mimicking my favorite god of death. The black qi arced from my blade and slammed into the Ifrit, engulfing its wings and detonating fiercely. Cursing, the demonic angel flapped its fuming wings as it crashed, twisting around to retaliate against me. - DaoistDK95fH2yrReplied to DaoistDK95fH
it can be considered a sequel(?) to Martial world
Unfortunately, I wasn't some Mary Sue protagonist who knew miraculous medical skills or was a gifted alchemist, so I couldn't concoct any spirit pills or elixirs. I was just some guy who knew how to fight. Rather than thinking of me as the typical Chinese cultivation story protagonist, it would be more accurate to identify me with the more balanced (but still overpowered) Korean murim story protagonist. I wasn't that much of a Gosu, but I certainly wasn't Yun Che or any of the many Chinese masters slash traditional Chinese medicine practitioners that were so popular everywhere. - DaoistDK95fH2yrReplied to Tomoyuki
true martial world
Unfortunately, I wasn't some Mary Sue protagonist who knew miraculous medical skills or was a gifted alchemist, so I couldn't concoct any spirit pills or elixirs. I was just some guy who knew how to fight. Rather than thinking of me as the typical Chinese cultivation story protagonist, it would be more accurate to identify me with the more balanced (but still overpowered) Korean murim story protagonist. I wasn't that much of a Gosu, but I certainly wasn't Yun Che or any of the many Chinese masters slash traditional Chinese medicine practitioners that were so popular everywhere. - DaoistDK95fH2yrCommented
Nani? that fast? not that I don't loke it but it feels wierd to not go through 2+ volumes of filler and face slapping just for a kiss scene
Wedding - DaoistDK95fH2yrCommented
well said
Also, what rule stated that villains couldn't be human and do the right thing? We were simply villains because of circumstances – my choice to cultivate in a demonic sect, and my killing of enemies who attacked me. That didn't mean I had to be selfish, arrogant or ruthless. A person was made of many different facets. No one was completely good or completely evil.