Review Detail of DaoistDK95fH in I Became a Pawn Shop Owner

Item: I Became a Pawn Shop Owner
Rating: 4

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DaoistDK95fHLv12yrDaoistDK95fH

all I can say is, good concept but lackluster writing. The 'owner of a magical shop' troupe is interesting but the phrasing of the words and grammar pulls one out of the story I really like the concept so if you want me to edit some chaps for free hit me up on discord: Daoist RedSnow#2180

I Became a Pawn Shop Owner

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JESTER_EMPIRELv4JESTER_EMPIRE

I'm not the demon god lackey is also of this concept except it's a bookstore

2yr

yayamasthuraLv12yayamasthura

Omg! I hope the author do some editing. i like the concepts but i cant continue to read, the phrasing is so bad. please please😭😭

2yr

taylor9944Lv10taylor9944

If you like cool kind of mc this is not for you he is shocked about something every other sentence it took him a whole month to even ask the system about cultivation and everytime he asks the system something it responds with classic you don't need to know or you will know in the future

2yr