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Oppenheimer IS BACK! 🍾 And his name isn't Oppenheimer still.🤔 Meh. Who Cares about my crazy gibberish 🤷. Welcome BACK Partner 👍 WE missed You 🥹 And in Hope this FF being a good one, here some approval
Just a small rant from my part. So ignore it as You wish. ALL of your stories are "Good", but riddle with flaws and inconsistance. And that's OK!!😁 They are Fanfictions, means to entertain, not flawless litterary bestseller. And they do their job: Entertaining. That's all they're is to ask.🥰 Now the small rant as promise. A brief critic of 3 of your work "not really to my taste": 1. Riser Phenex isn't a villain: as all your work have in common, this one too Say "fuck the plot", but more thoroughly; a little too much even. It's looks like something went wrong in the process, and then it goes "fuck it! I ain't fixing that. It's part of the plot now!". In this particular story, I felt that You are forcing way to much in practically everything. And it's going from comedic FF, to serious, to crack fic. Losing me in the way. 2. Is it wrong to become a scumbag: all in all a good FF. The MC has a goal, drive, character arc-ish, and a classic Akikan FF plot progression. A good point to highlight is the fact that the MC isn't "Préfecture" in this (in most Akikan FF the MC is mister perfect, borderline omnipotente). What makes me ranting here is that the entier story not in Rakudai Kishi feels like fillers, losing impact and coherence; throwing me out along the line. 3. Tanuki Rise of the yokau clan: criticizing this one was unpleasant ,'cause I love Nurarihon no mago, I FUKING LOVE IT. But it's called a rant for something, so let's move on. Fortunately, the Nurarihon no mago was impeccable (biased much), and the rest was OK-is. The réal problem was the MC, he is Too Perfect. It's like watching Saitama from One Punch Man, making us loose interest in the MC, and more focused one the secondary character, which are not dwelled on. Ok, that's it for the monthly ranting of a slightly crazy Guy with to much Time on his hand😎. ALL in all, I love your work, thank your for blessing us poor mortals with your magnificent Art. And good Day to You sir. 👍
Let us all be honest. It's the classic cliché Sign-in System Chinesse translates FF (decent translation by the way). The chance are good that it's just an édit for an existing translation ( which again ain't Bad). But that's just the premise. The story in it's self is, again, a cliché. BUT!!! a cliché is a cliché for a reason, and up to here (chap 23), it's quite Ok-ish. Will it remain is the question though. Either way, it's passable at best and slightly annoying at worst.So for now, TATAKAE!
This has nothing to do with this FF (even if I like it quite a bit 👍). Why isn't your pseudo not Oppenheimer! Each Time I see it, that's what I read! Oppenheimer!Oppenheimer!Oppenheimer! Pfiou ! 🧘 That's about it. Take it as the rant of a slightly crazy Guy with to much Time on his hand. A good Day to You sir.
Pretty good so far, but with so few chap (10 for now), a deep review isn't possible. But here is a slight personal critic or advise (take it as you like, or not at all. Your choice) :It's obvious you are writing a "cliche" and comited to them. Which is GREAT ! CLICHÉ are the veine of fanfic, and I hope you "use" them and not be "used" by them. Just the slam rant of a nobody, but overall it's a good premice. Hope to see more of it.
I'm not taking side here and I may be wrong. But as an author myself, writing new stories and short one shot sometimes help re-ignite the inspiration or bring motivation. This might be my case, writing isn't difficult, being willing to keep writing is. Inspiration comes and goes, so hiatus are common, and drops too. Well, that's that. Your strories are great, so please don't drop them. P.S: I'm an author of soft porn and heavy smut, so you ain't finding my work here. (And because I'm not that at it too)
Interesting design, great potential, some visibles mistakes but understandable for a begining and a beginer. To my humble opinion, for this kind of setting, the character building of the MC is essential. And as it goes now (in me eyes) the MC will just be generic isekai guy and will be bland in the long way. All in all, improvement is key👍. And good continuation. Hoping updates are regular though.
Hazbin hotel is a very interesting verse to explore. And sadly only a few dare to delve in it, and persevere through it. I personaly recommend the fanfic "Memories of the past (Hazbin hotel)" by Author_author. Contrary to this fanfic, it take a more mature and serious approach, but precise and interesting in my own humble view. What I'm seeing in this fic, and I can be wrong, is a more relax and slightly comedic view of the Hazbin verse. Which is also good, as that world is a mix between seriousness and comedy, it's "Hell" after all. What I want to say is, the potential of this fic is immense, and yes, it can be bad, it can be good, but it can't be unintersting. So good luck and inspiration in it. 👍[img=recommend]
If I were to critic, I would say that the MC do not put to much thought into surviving but more into leveling. Which is understandable as the world he lived in just suddenly change and he decides to focus on something else, concidering the world as a game to coppe with it. But, if this continue sadly enough, the story will get predictable and boring. What he would need is either to change his vision or a reality check. Character development is important.
You're welcome. Even if he do not make the right decision, as long as he learn from them, it's all right. He is a "cheat" character as you introduce him so he should "evolve" to be better. As the story is only at it's begining, improvement are still possible. And as I said before, this story as potential. The MC is not a classic reincarnator. The plot is not the same as the anime (mostly) so no copy paste. And FINALY and MOST IMPORTANTLY this is not a HAREM. Harem brokes good story, at least that's my opinion. Any way, Good story bro/sis. Continue 👊👍
Don't really make review, but here's my thought. Yes, the MC is a coward and makes some times dumb decisions. BUT as said he is, or was, "a normal highschool student" and a human before all. And the author wants to make the story realistic so just think "he is human and humans are bound to make mistakes". All I wish is that the MC learn from his mistake, which some time he don't. And that makes me sad. But all in all, good story but can and have the potential to be better.
Quit good I suppose ? Hazbin hotel is a vast world to portrate so adding OC is understandable. But the MC is (quite some time) a spectator of it's own story. Not dumb nor useless per se. But viewed as a background character. The story being at it's begining, changes and improvement are still possible. That is just my humble opinion. But nether less, I still quite enjoy the story. Please continue, and do not depresed, You have potential and improvement are visible.