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All ready reading it, and it's, *chef's kiss* just wonderful!! If anyone wants to know what it's about, it's about a person from earth transmigrating to a magical world (surprise surprise) and getting a system. In order to become stronger, he has to become the strongest sect leader of that world. But the thing that makes it unique is that instead of gathering people of that world, he recruits people from earth, same as him. Of course, they all think it's a vr game. 5/5 stars, please read!!!
I can just imagine a big, bloody battlefield, the sky painted red and sounds of fighting echoing everywhere, only for the camera to room in on the legendary Rolling Army, rolling this way and that, dodging weapons, before jumping up and killing an enemy... Their motto is probably "Let's roll!"
I loved this chapter, but I felt like the cultivation was sort of unnessesary... he could have just wished for complete control of anything in his bookcafe (so if a fight or something broke out he could just shift everyone back into chairs, or make it so they couldn't talk, or something along those lines...) But still, I love it, and can't wait to read further!
I didn't find any problems with it, although maybe you should let Kara be a bit more involved (Like asking why there are people there, how they know about her, who the heck they are... ect...)