Romance in Paris, what's better then that classic setting? The plotline and the FMC are really complementing to each other. One magnifies the other's beauty. A simple drunken bet being the driving force of the story and the various incidents in the daily life of the characters being so relatable really stirs a perfect combo of a little fantasy in real life. Besides the author's writing style of telling the story to the readers from a third person pov is the best way I like reading a romance novel.❤️❤️❤️
The story is quite good but it has a lot of errors with punctuations and grammatical factors. I think you should review the draft after you complete writing before you publish the chapters cause those mistakes take a lot out of the story and destroys its flow. I also think you should put a little more work in the dialogues and some of them are really out of order. I hope you don't take it the wrong way. Keep up writing.
the " s in this para are out of the mark
and a long blue dress ( wearing instead of and would be better IMO )
And my entire family... ( it's quite odd and a little bit out of the line )
Bostic, North Carolina
Great job author 👌, your way of representing the world and the scenario was just 🤩, I mean it was really fantastic. Job well done. The plotline is engaging with intriguing characters and the flow of the novel is really smooth. Hope you keep updating new chapters fast
Damn the writing style l, quite the unique feature. Although many may suggest you to change it or say something like it's unprofessional I think you shouldn't change it( only my opinion, no to disregard others' ). Thought I think a little bit of work should be put to the expressing of emotions of the characters since you are using a dialogue style of writing, like when the dead bodies are described it's makes the reader (some at least) literally feel disgusted ( i.e, actually very fantastic ) but as of the person who is actually using the dialogues to describe it doesn't feel many emotions ( IMO) so it would be better to express their feelings, expressions and conditions while they are in the middle of conversation. Like while starting the conversation you can try expressing their facial expression and in the middle how it suddenly changes as the situation progresses. The graphic description of the deaths is awfully awesome. Waiting for more chapters.
Couples having a cat fight before they fall in love, childhood friends (frenemies) becoming lovers, these are some of my favourite tropes. The characters of Mac (it's quite hard for me to spell the rest😶) and Ace are fabulous and the drama and chemistry between them is just wow. Keep it up author.
Ain't it already like what you said?
Just reading the synopsis I started getting the GOT vives. Entering the story I was spellbound by the plotline and though I really love this genre but I don't get to read more on this in the way I want the plotline to go. Impressive job author 👍 I hope the story reaches some great heights with a lot of drama, romance and magic to it.
Neutral to nemesis, quite the transformation
Large wall ( The feeling of AOT oh yeah)
What now, drone in Edo Period Salute It's becoming more and more interesting
Lucky dog German shepherd in Japan Guess Usui is quite lucky too