Andy_5641
of reading
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Read books
Gods not gods
senses not sense
changed perserved to perceived.
change tone to torn
His friend didn't have to "be" involved
In the last sentence, change where to were
The first sentence reads as though it is incomplete.
Question mark needed at the end of the sentence.
Du She ignored him as "he" lowered......
Delete "a" in the second last sentence. i.e. sentence starting with, "This interesting.........
As he casually fell into "a" deep slumber
Last sentence of this paragraph needs to be re-written
accept him but if "he" makes trouble
add a comma after "lit"
question mark required at the end of the second sentence (rhetorical question)