Hi, I'm Daylightmoon, love reading and writing!
Hey everyone, shameless self-review here! This story is completely and exclusively free(!) for all my readers because I care more about them and their pockets! There will be no locked chapters, donations, Patreon, Tikkie, basically no money, even if you force the money down my throat(sheesh, they get it author!). There are multiple reasons why, they are listed on the auxiliary volume, you can read more if you are interested(although literally no one reads it lol). So, coming to the writing part, I try to make it legible and want to finish this story soon(after my exams of course) because I have a habit of leaving things unfinished, but let me stick to my guns and try to finish it in a month(to a year :p ). The stability is okay, it's reliable once I get into the schedule(~cause I'm only human!!!). The development is pretty good though, not gonna lie. it's kind of a mystery with lore and an escape room plot(I love lore, thank you matpat, for inspiring me, too bad he's leaving :_( The character design is good, the world background is good, the character design is stellar and all I can say is if you want something fun but also shorter to pass time but also want to keep yourself engaged, and want to have that feeling of 'what's next, what would happen next?', then I would recommend reading it. The (first) book consists of 125 chapters, with 1250 words in each chapter. Each room has 2-3 parts, and there are 50 rooms in total. There, I've said everything I want to, oh wait, I forgot something! First.
Hey, I just saw your review, and thank you anyway for the rating. I don't believe in getting revenue from these kinds of sites, but I see you're beginning something and you need some variation(and I thought about it, and it doesn't hurt to get even a little exposure), so I gave some thought about it and submitted my novel in your site. I hope it helps you in the long run and wish you success on your site. All I expect and hope you will do is keep my novel safe and secure from copyright issues.
Letters? Short chapters? Looooore? Count me the f*ck in! *clears throat* what I'm trying to say is, I love the characters, and how everything is slowly unfolding, when you find out just the simplest of things, you get satisfaction, like you're sherlock holmes or something. Although they could be confusing(in terms of context and the length), the author explains it consicely and if you keep reading, you'll find what you're looking for. I love this aaah, please keep writing author!
I'm telling you, authors' ideas are getting more and more creative by the day. everything about this is magnificent, the writing, the pace, the plot, the world, everything! I love how you add artwork to help readers imagine what they look like. Thank you for that! Great work, and keep writing, you might get somewhere.
where is your opening apostrophe?
srry that was the original, srry I was a little confused. I deleted and reposted it. Can you see it?
a cotton factory town, Asher Blackwood and Henry Williams find themselves caught up in a series of strange events. Suspicion falls on the mysterious entity known as Neverland, leading to a devastating catastrophe. Desperate for answers and justice, they seek refuge in the enigmatic realm of EverGreen. In EverGreen, they encounter the enigmatic Yuan Xhin, a master of magic. Asher discovers his ability to control black flames, while Henry possesses the power to heal. Driven by their desire for revenge against Neverland, the duo embarks on thrilling adventures alongside magical creatures. Amidst their quest, Asher finds himself captivated by Alexia Grey, a remarkable individual who lacks magical abilities. Their connection grows as they navigate the wonders of a magical festival, where Asher hones his powers and unravels the secrets of his own past. However, tragedy strikes when Alexia meets a devastating fate, plunging Asher into grief and turmoil. As he delves deeper into the mysteries surrounding him, shocking revelations come to light. What lies ahead for Asher and the secrets he uncovers? Brace yourself for a captivating journey of love, loss, and unexpected twists."
you're welcome. I'm just glad if I helped. Beginning aspiring authors need all the support and feedback we can receive!
I like the mysterious feel this whole story gives off, and the light and dark humor added to this story. You did a good job introducing the main character(s), that's quite a skill and engages the readers, so I'll say you are off to a good start! I'm sad it only got 7k views, because this is quite the tale. Though, I think the main reason is the synopsis being short(a little too short...) but I think that's not the main problem. Just keep writing, and you'll be fine :)
Hey author, I'll say, I can't deduce how good the story is with just two chapters, but so far, so good. I like the anti-hero feel your protagonist feels, though I cannot say if he's a good guy or a bad guy in the end. But your story emits potential, that's all I want to say for now. When your story reaches 20 chapters, dm me, and I'll delete this and leave a fresh, new, even more awesome review! Until then, keep writing, and good luck in your journey!
You're the kind of person to say 'Uhu this is my first book' and write a magnum opus. 🤣🤣 All I wanted to say is that your book is worthy of each and every view it got, and that your descriptions are good(aah, I'm jealous). I like your characters, your story and your writing quality. Style is ok, but that doesn't bother me much. Though, I'm not that content with your synopsis, you could always better it with some editing :) Kudos to you author! (I have suggested a rewritten version of your synopsis with the help if AI in the comment section down below. Do refer it if you prefer to make some changes).
Thx for the review :) I rlly appreciate it. P.S: I could actually put 'curious but I'm undergoing puberty' in a tag lol
I like how you actually wrote on of the known side-effects of timetravel. Nice research.