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daylightmoon12344525dPostedHi, your book looks like something you could sell in amazon with some tweaks here and there! I like your writing style, it is just as unique and good as any good author. I see a lot of potential, and this is one of my fav books to review bc of the well spaced paragraphs and nicely formulated sentences. I would suggest you to keep reading and hope you reach your goal you were talking about at the end of the chapters.
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Aww, you can't start a story with things like these, they make me cry
My father was one of the greatest Generals of the Hei Empire. Despite not having seen my mother, the love my father showered me with, covered it all. - daylightmoon12344525dReplied to BrightBrain256
alright let's do it!
Chapter 1: Prologue - daylightmoon12344525dPosted
The first few chapters were quite dark, and selling someone at such a young age is just...painful, I hope everything will turn out good in the end :( The writing is good, I would suggest cutting down on the long paragraphs(bc it's strains my eyes to read them) and the writing style is unique. overall, the story is well-written, so kudos to the author and keep writing
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No amount of sorry and food will take back the nightmares she faced with the nobleman
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Noooo long chapters, my arch-nemesis
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Author this story is fast-paced and unique, from switching between past and present tense, like it's literally my kind of thing! I'm sure anyone who reads it will enjoy it(well, maybe except for some light-hearted people lol) I like how the story is developing and your writing is great! Good job and keep writing!
- daylightmoon12344525dPosted
Author, how do you not have any reviews yet? This story is awesome and I mean it! I've already added it in my library. The characters, the plot, the story development are all great! The writing style is unique with the humor a cherry at the top. I don't see any major world background yet, but I can expect it in the following chapters since he relives his past. The idea is quite unique, and I'm here to see this blow up! Kudos to the author and keep writing!
- daylightmoon12344525dCommentedShe said it twice to emphasize the fact that I fake my emotions and reactions because I legitimately bear none due to my chaotic past. It's the main reason why I went on a blind rage and destroyed about 90% of the Gods, and all of the Entitled Gods other than 3.
- daylightmoon12344525dCommented
For me evolution is the mutation of animal genes and adaptation. Sorry, been doing a lot of research in biology.
[Evolution. What exactly comes to mind when that term is mentioned? Typically, it's used to refer to "growth". An alternative would be "experience". The undeniable truth is, overcoming hardships grants experience, but also consumes emotions. The more hardships you experience and overcome, the more your emotions will be affected and drained. In a nutshell, evolution is created by the reduction of human emotions. Taking that context into consideration, have I reached the peak of evolution?] - daylightmoon12344525dPosted
The story is great! The writing style is unique to hook the reader in the first chapters. But I didn't like how you pictured the FC as a sweet, innocent little angel, those are a bit...cliche? But hey, that's just my opinion, the story is great so far and I'm looking forward to how this ends. Kudos to the author!
- daylightmoon12344525dCommented
whyyy
He heard his mother was dead while giving birth to him. Since then, he never met his mother and only saw her picture. His father would always say that his mother was above watching over him. Now that his father was dead, he was scared that, just like his mother, he would only have pictures to see in the future. - daylightmoon12344525dCommentedSome of the men even had impatient in their gaze. No one was paying attention to whatever was being said. "Would we not see dad again?" the young boy turned to the two ladies as the casket was lowered. He was just a child and did not fully understand the concept of death.
- daylightmoon12344525dCommentedThen, the vendor packed the fruits in a bag and handed them over to me. "Take these with you. And stuff your bellies with them. Moreover, don't even think about the payment. Just consider it a reward for protecting us. It's all because of you, knights, that we folk can sleep at night peacefully," he said.
- daylightmoon12344525dCommented
the fruits are mouthwatering? Strange, never heard that before
"But I have done nothing yet," I spoke while looking over the mouthwatering fruits. - daylightmoon12344525dPosted
Hi author, you did a really great job writing this story, kudos to that! I see a lot of potential here. The characters are great and the synopsis is so eye-catching, I'm sure this story will pick up in no time!! Your writing has a few grammar errors here and there, nothing that can't be fixed with grammarly and some proof reading. And yes, I'm not a big fan of slow-paced webnovels, but hell, this is so good, I think I'm going to stick to see what happens.
