A chapter is a scene. If the "scene" isn't finished the chapter isn't either. The smallest chapter in all of Harry Potter was around 2500 words, the average chapter length was close to 5000. These tidbits are infuriating.

Sasuke was 7 when the massacre happened. He graduates 5 years later. Is this an au thing or something?

Ai junk.

The ages are all wrong.

Jesus christ, I can't understand this mess. Multiple paragraphs are completely wrong and make no sense. Random facts added in the middle of converstaions and internal Monolog that don't belong as well. Very low effort.

Too childish.

Way, way too contrived. I get it, you want conflict, but this isn't it bub.

While this is good, the chapters are tiny

At that point I would just write my own story. My recommendations are as follows. 1 use sapling ai grammar checker. It's totally free. 2 get grammarly, there is a free version that works on phones. Write the story with grammrly enabled, then whenever you finish a chapter, copy the text and paste it into sapling grammar checker. It will highlight anything missing, and give recommendations on what is wrong and how to fix it. once that is done copy it again and paste it wherever the story is at such as here on web novel. DO NOT USE ANY AI SUCH AS CHAT GPT. It is very obvious when it's used. Go read Chrysalis on royal road. It's a very good example of writing a story well.

It wouldnt work. I would have to add a bunch of stuff that's missing.

He tells us what happens and doesn't show us what happens.

All telling, no showing. Not storytelling at all.

A story is suppose to be about showing, not telling. While this well written grammatically... ut frankly reads like a shopping list. He did this, and he did that. There isn't a story here at all. Just a recounting of events.

I thought i was having a stroke.

Yeah, I'll drop it here. It was fun 43adjng the rambling of a pantser writer, but this curse of one handed was the last straw. Goodbye, Mr. Pantser.

Way way too extra. Far too much telling and not enough showing.

I have to drop it here. You committed the cardinal sin of erasing the memories of the person who was isekaied What's the point after that? He isn't the same person who died so its not really an isekai at all anymore. Furthermore I can't see Bruce accepting the symbiote unless he was desperate, and certainly not giving up control of his body.

You Need to show that who is speaking changed somehow.

The translation is not good enough at all. for instane brother-in-law. why was that used instead of the mans name? therre is a noticable lack of "her""he" and other pronouns where is would be natural. its frankly just bad.

Haha, no, thats a writing skip.