forced plot, no flow in the writing, words seem out of place In sentences, cleche self insert character into a fantasy environment, it's better then the original Chinese bullshit but not by much

it's mid, written well, but the mcs personality just doesn't really mesh well with his backstory. his quirks are good but his interactions with them are just written strangely to me overall better then most novels of this website and a good time killer but not something I'm left wanting more after reading to the current chapter

nah dude this story's sooo good keep it going

plus grammarly corrects it as you write so no extra time spent

its not sakumos personality I have a problem with its how you've framed him into the family dynamic. Plus I recommended the correction programs because they show you where you've messed up so you can improve. If you took up writing in your spare time you obviously have some passion for it, I find that most people enjoy getting better at what there passionate about and was just trying to help.....

oh and he's got a poisonous bite that's about it

nidhog is the giant one who eats at the roots of ygdrassil but he doesn't breath fire or anything he's just massive

the fire dragon in Norse mythology is fafnir

Historically its because if your child's favored by the king/emperor, or if you assinate the other children, your kid gets to be the next ruler.... plus most of the women in the harem are third or fourth daughters that came from family's with great wealth or power that want to gain the emperors goodwill, like general of the military or those merchant family's with a monopoly of a certain good across a large area of land such as wine or rice most marriages are decided by the family's of the sons or daughters and very few people have the ability to choose there own spouse in those times arranged marriages are still quite popular with the upper Class of China even today and it's not uncommon for millionaires to have a couple family's at the same time

I'm assuming the Amazon pirates were at one time part of rocks armada, or she often sold intelligence to him

she only sees people's deaths and even then there not set in stone luffy's prediction was wrong

chat gpt** not chat get

nah bro, I'm not an editor, it was merely a comment on the level of grammar for interested party's, just run your story through grammarly or chat get, it'll improve it greatly and show you where you made mistakes.... plus most of my review is about the character interactions which I feel are the most important

While still readable, I've read mtls with better grammar, I liked the interactions with Mc and Kakashi, but the sakumo interactions are bad, the love interest is an oc which I'm cool with but the Mc simps way to hard right off the bat, plus mcs like mentally mid 20's at least and she's like 10 bro that's just gross I get kohona has some were standards when it comes to the academy and people falling in love, but its different for them because there both the same age physically and mentally, him declaring his love at first sight comes off with some serious pedomaru vibes and kinda killed the story for me

I agree with ya there buddy I've never been a Sakura fan tbh she gets carried by the plot more than baruto and Sasuke combined to be able to participate in the fight against kaguya and overall comes across as a poorly written character

it's just how life is Chakra is an amplifier of what already exists in the body if your strong Chakra will make you better, itachi would wipe the floor with Sakura in terms of physical strength and he has a literal body breaking disease killing him

lee is the only one that can't use jutsu, might guy is very able to use them with no issues but he chooses not to to honor his father.... plus sakuras strength isn't a physical strength it's extreme Chakra control she pushes out of her at point of contact same as tsunade, while guy and lee actually use their physical muscles... hence why she can't keep up in terms of speed to Sasuke, naruto, satori, pain, orochimaru, kaguya, ect. Because even with Chakra speed is based on how well you use your physical self, arguably Sakura Is one of the weakest ninjas physically, and would be worse off then even Ino if she did get the training of tsunade, who had both extreme physicality and her Chakra strength unlike Sakura, if you were trying to show a strong female character from naruto, kaguya, tsunade, kushina, hinata, the 5th mizukage would have all been better options but even those are still outclassed by men, even kaguya as close to a godess you can get in naruto lore , the male members of her family from boruto make her look weak af, sheesh I mean it even transfers over to summons, the slug summon is the only summon from the sannin who can't use sage mode and has the lowest combat power, look at kohona's jonin sensei kourenai is definitely the weakest of the bunch

I've read 24 chapters of this, all that are currently available, this story has so much potential it's crazy... but the flow of the story is all off, Mc's personality changes at the drop of a hat, there's more plot holes then chapters, the every choice the author makes makes me like this story less