Naw bro the gay jokes make me dead

Great job so far keep[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update] it up dude

Lets gooo finally a baseball fic with a pitcher as the main character recently i like to read a manhwa about a baseball but would never thought to find a diamond ace fic in here

BRO YOUR STORY IS GREAT

Update bro

Bro you need to remove the unnecessary 1 star review

Question🙋‍♂️ What happened to bam? And who is the love interest?

Damn this is a very good fanfic for you who want a chill and light tone story This is obviously not a serious fanfic but good enough to pass some time when you are bored

19 chapter and it was so good the author probably could do something with the humans and not too focusing on riku alone and make the story world development more interesting but hey i know this is just a translation. And man as a non native english speaker this is a great translation Keep it up bro

Great story man, suitable when you're bored and want to pass some times i really recommend to read this books My criticism is well because the marvel main plot is just started make sure when the mc have a big role in the main plot you can make some marvel chara in the story dont forget how important marvel original character like tony, cap, or even gwen, etc make sure they got some parts in your story try to add some more good marvel's comic plot that suitable for the mc future plot Don't forget to not just follow the marvel plot, bend it a bit and probably make it permanent in the story And i think you need to make a few chapter/ arc about his family/close one For example gwen really got a spider power and their relationship is at strain Or his father/butler povor viewpoint about him go creative man It's just an advice don't feel obligated to do it, my point is try to make the story more exciting with some creative way (Just make sure you don't feel obligated with the reader adivice, consider whether the advice is good or bad for your story future plot/writing syle)

Wait, is secret killer already finished?

I mean that is the point of fanfic isnt it? To make something different from the original just as much as you want

Very good but need more spacing, i dont know for others but for me it needs more spacing cuz its in webnovel not fanfiction, webnovel is designed for a novels that have less than 5000 words maybe even less than 3000, thats why it needs more spacing than ffn who clearly can take more than enough words (5000-10000)

Agreed

As a non native english speaker i cant relate or understand how you feel And im glad.

So far so good but I think it can be better if you increase the dialogue and ibteraction between the mc and other character but If you compare this chapter with the first chapter i can see the increase in amount of dialogue

My man became as straight forwardly as possible, a man of focus, commitment, and sheer will. He knew his priority. To bang black widow, what a chad

That was cute af, but still chibi was more cuter

You're right (i think?)

Ah yes, doujutsu the peak of cringeness in a fanfic