Perishable_Heaven
Just a guy obsessed with creation and necromacy; looking to become a professional writer.
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This is one of those stories that a experienced reader can tell the author put their heart into. While the length of the chapters are on the short side i will say that each chapter carries its own personality. There were one or 2 errors I noticed while reading but it's not the big of a deal, I just tend to over edit my own work, so i tend to pay attention to the placement of every punctuation mark etc. etc. I would like to say this story has some potential down the line as it progresses. Keep up the work Author (^_-)b\
Pretty good pacing, with the story not feeling rushed, and overall really good writing quality. The Pacing is a bit on the slower side so we don't get to see that many sides of the protagonist as of chapter 6 but he seems pretty chill and level headed. His name keep making me think he would turn out to be a vampire thought. keep up the great work!
Pretty interesting read, the author put a lot of thought and effort into the story and it has a steady progression. In the beginning I was thanking that there would be 2 main characters but fortunately that wasn't the case.
P.S - Just to clarify Fable is not regretting his choice he is more or less shocked at how the one goblin he wasn't paying attention too, abruptly introduced violence to the innocent tribe. *** P.P.S - Just because we see something in the story doesn't mean fable see's it and just because fable experiences something doesn't mean we will experience it. this story in not from Fable's Perspective even though he is the main character. Do you know who's perspective it is?
because nobody else will.
*Sigh* And Creators will always instantly regret everything they have ever created while still showering them in love.
*Sigh* Goblins will be goblins.
Honestly I love story that takes place inside a book of the characters universe. It allows use the reader to see how competent our protagonist and a bit of their personality by how they choose to interact with the story they find themselves in. The writing style is a conversational based with some detail about the happening going on and some background detail. I like it. The writing is smoothly connected and the transitions between scenes are smooth. you can tell the author is genuinely invested and cares about their story. 5 stars your doing a great job, keep it up
It's been bout a week, so i think imma be a little shameless and give myself a big old 5 Star Rating, hahaha! Alright So Lets review the Novel so far as of Chapter 2(Part 3/3), I feel that I've have done a great job when it comes to the overall writing elements and especially the world building (I wanna cry, so much world building). It takes me a about a hour to write a chapters draft but I edit and refine; edit and refine; edit and edit; refine and refine; elaborate and edit, followed by a delete and a refine. You get it. It takes me about a 1 or 2 days to finish a chapter rarely shorter; but I want this novel to be the best it can be as Fable's Story is only the first of Many others who unite under one pantheon in order for Authority to ascend.
Alright, first the carrot. This is a rather interesting working work in the prospective of the author, in taking their experiences and turning into a unique adaptation of fantasy. (As there are only 2 chapter's I can't really comment to much on the fantasy aspect as we are still in the introductory faze of the novel) This Novel offers personality and help bring a new experience to it's readers. Now the Stick. This novel as quiet a few issues with grammar and punctuation and can be hard to read for some individuals. My Honest Opinion: I believe this story can be a interesting read if you can push past some of it's current issues. Genuinely the only issue i have the run on sentences. other than that it's rather easy to read that could easily be a very good book to read. keep up the work.
Interesting story, after reading half-way through 1st chapter i got hooked on how the story was going to progress; while, yes there isn't anything much of interest happening in the first chapter what caught my eye was the writing quality, story pacing, and the emphasis on the characters involved. This wasn't a rush job and there was care actually put into the writing process elevating it's quality. I've just arrived at the 6th chapter but i can say that this is something i plan to keep reading. Keep going author your doing a great job!
I'm kind of getting invested think I'll add this to my collection after reading a few more chapters. Also you used the word 'Sit' when I think you meant to use the word 'Seat' just something i caught while reading.
I have an extremely active imagination and thanks to that I don't think I'll be unable to unsee that image for a while. It's not disturbing it's just... it's just...
Can we get a R.I.P for our mentally absent mini-boss