I found the premise of this story to be really interesting and engaging. The author did a good job conveying the protagonist's troubles and I love those types of stories. My real gripe was the punctuations. Remember to add a space after a comma and also put periods or the appropriate punctuations at the end of dialogues but other than that ,it's a solid read. I definitely recommend putting this in your library.

Explore their inner thoughts, especially Shelly since she's your pov character. You have already done it but do it more so that we could understand her better aside from dialogues and snippets of narration.

I gotta say, after reading your story it was very interesting and I would love to keep on reading it. The plot was great and it has a lot of fun ideas and the main duo's interaction was great too. My only gripe with story is the structure and sometimes it is hard to understand each character's traits but overall, it is definitely a great read!

Hey! I've read the first few chapters of your story and I have to say, it was a very enjoyable read. I really like the characters and the world building you've done, it feels connected to reality but I think it's just me. I also like your wording a lot and it sets the tone really nicely. This is definitely a story that I'll finish, keep up the great work!