I gotta say, after reading your story it was very interesting and I would love to keep on reading it. The plot was great and it has a lot of fun ideas and the main duo's interaction was great too. My only gripe with story is the structure and sometimes it is hard to understand each character's traits but overall, it is definitely a great read!
Jozan
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LIKEExplore their inner thoughts, especially Shelly since she's your pov character. You have already done it but do it more so that we could understand her better aside from dialogues and snippets of narration.
Jozan:do you have any recommendations on how to fix that problem please