How is a no-name sith player going to win against us when our MC was one of the first force sensitive players. It's pure nonsense

For a force sensitive person he uses the force for extremely low amounts.

Man this chapter enraged me. Why not just use the dark side of the force wasn't the MC supposed to be a grey jedi or something

Messing with the Pike Syndicate sounds like a horrible idea. Unless you have someone or something powerful backing you it sounds like a death sentence.

Wearing a mask thing sucks ass by the way

Other than grammar and the characters dialogues everything is perfect. My problem with the dialogues are that they feel a bit robotic, unnatural, but I think as you continue to write more chapters you'll improve in it.

Oh i didn't know this was a child protagonist novel sad that it is. Aldo the way write is weird author it feels like a chinese person wrote the story.

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You are a piece of shit for stealing other peoples hard work

Dude this is Path of Ruin its author is Rictus. You din't write this you stole it ....................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................

I really like your idea of becoming the high septo. I've never seen it done before so thank you for it Hhhhhhhgggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggttgggggggggghgggggggggggg

Other than grammar mistakes its good Hdhdhdhdhdhdhdhdhdhdhdhdhdhdhfhfhfhfhdhdhfhfhfhfhfhfhfhfhfhfhfhfhfhfhfhfhfhfhfhfhdhfhfhfhfhfhfhfhfhfhfhf

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Perfect really. I don't have anything to say bad about this novel. ............................ ..................................,...............................................................................

And the grammar is not that good i think you should edit the chapters after you write them.

Most things are good with the story but you should really try to write the conversations the characters have with eachother better, They are just bland and robotic like the people don't have any kind of soul and emotions

I like It ssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss

It actually surprised me it's a pretty good story i would say even great finding stories like this in this site is hard. Dddddddddddddffffffddf

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House Trant doesn't have an Island their keep is Gallowsgrey. And the story is too rushed in just one chapter you wrote all the developments he did in years. You should have researched a little bit before writing a story dude and There are some grammer mistakes