this is one of chinese story poison lol , it is a red flag at this point

you don't simply browse dxd fic and not expecting harem . the question is . is it a good story or one of those trashy harem story lul

here should be Ur .. not ultear

no harem .

for fun lulw

maybe using enigma power to create blackhole to store items and rubick telekinesis to pick it XD

it is for comedic .. there is a line after that on which it says " he stop fooling around "

i can't understand this either :v

this is not how prana works on nasuverse .. but, it is how mana works in dota 2 game . i guess the author is using dota 2 concept . zet ( arc warden ) is dota 2 playable hero. his magic exort wex quas is invoker dota 2 hero skills too.. it is confusing crossover, need to specify which world law to follow

be careful .. when you are more fit and toned body the gays will start coming out to comment. . i saw it most of the times on fitness influencer lulw

noooooooooooo .. i can see your writing improvement along the way tho . . another ff down in the gutter sadge

wow hahaha .. these cheesy lines give a bit of flavour in relationship .. not everyday tho just at the right moments

agree . author can bring out the feeling quite nicely , the description is detailed enough .. well as long as quality is always like this i don't mind if the update is a bit long .. when i come back to read after few months it feels nice

i don't think he has schedule .. im fine as long as this get updated eventually . will be back in few months when there is more chapter

keanu is way more cooler when he is aged hahahah we all agreed on this

chapter is too short ): .. gotta wait a year for chapter build up .. see you when i see you

i catches up after 2 months not opening this on scrib hub .. see you when i see you again waiting for more chapter .. it is very nice your writing reflects the tension that is happen .wether it is MC hurried and frantic mind and the wives calm , calculating manner on that conversation . too much character is hard to keep up as writer XD. . but, it does make the world feels bigger . it is writing limitation, i hope you can keep effectively choose which character gets screentime for better story.

strive story is kinda short .. fleshed out interaction is much needed imo .. since this is a novel , interaction between character can be fleshed out more . might be hard tho .. you can do it author , if you have more interaction the chapter better longer .. it is fine if the update is leas often as long as the interaction is not cut in the middle because of chapter end

true .. i can't see where is this going .. maybe heph and aphro got their peace for a bit before another chaos .. that is all i can think of

Lore and world building are very well thought and interesting. Character design is good it just the story moving too fast. The dialogue is too short so, we don't really get to know the character more or get the feeling of most dialogue. Slow down a bit and add bit more dialogue in character communication, it will be better imo. Not, only you have longer chapter with less lore and story material to unveil.