Fixing the grammar alone would fix most of it imo,but I could only put up with it for a few chapters... It amazes me that the author is supposedly American...
Invisible walls always getting in the way of some good ol' freeroam
Again he tried to touch the wall, which was solid and seemingly impenetrable. He tried to walk while touching it, but he walked many meters and still it did not end.
Just the thought of an iceberg floating through magma seems trippy
The bright spot of light entered the sprawling world of the sea of magma with occasional icebergs floating on it and lightning striking from the red clouds of fire in the sky.