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Rishabh_Yadav_01272dCommentedAuthor is following dc comics story telling itself, sometimes hero or villains are shown weak and the other time those villains or heros come close to conquering the world or being the strongest itself 😂😂. I thought this authors story will give fresh breath or some twist to dc comic stories but its same old dc!!! Author did nothing different for this fanfic but follow dc itself and just introduced his own characters. Maybe he is a fanatic of dc , like people who still read dc comic even if they are worst of all!!
Everyone immediately turned to me as soon as I appeared, and Merlin was the first to react, aiming his already drawn bow at me and letting an arrow loose.- Rishabh_Yadav_01275dCommented
Unnatural !! Calling husband. Instead dear / sweety or darling also would have been more natural !! Take note author!!
"You are right, husband" Andromeda nodded her head in understanding as she decided to end the conversation then and there. "Oh, and Harry, please call me Andi, we are practically family" The woman said with a soft smile as she ruffled his hair. - Rishabh_Yadav_01275dCommented
You don’t call your cousin as "cousin" everytime in a conversation . Its with brother/sister or by name or nickname !!! Its makes reading experience unnatural !!! Remember next time author!!
"Come on, cousin. You need to live up to your mistakes… You simply can't take them back" Andromeda stated firmly, but she couldn't hide the mirth in her eyes. - Rishabh_Yadav_012712dCommented
Its like the author is slowly and surely making mc weaker and supporte characters stronger. The mc is barely keeping up with other powers of the world . Itsj
Since Kisuke wasn't expecting it to open like a jaw, he couldn't avoid it by dodging to the sides, and even if he could jump back, Aika's 'sword' was faster. In a split second, the teeth instantly sank into Kisuke's flesh even though his defense was boosted to the highest levels. - Rishabh_Yadav_012727dReplied to CORNBRINGER
Does this post of yours has any meaning to it.?? You just post this when you dont want to explain anything. You know, till now from your story, I only deduced that the MC is weakest in grand scheme of character that really matter in the story. And i don’t mean the characters that have yet to grow. But the strong characters he is going to face in the future . And you as a author has not even taken a single step of showing an power progress in the MC after the intial power up at the start of the story. I know you show him training everyday but he is not making any kind of progress at all!!
His haunting words echoed in my mind, a reminder, a promise that he would return someday and that when he did, I would need to be ready to face him. - Rishabh_Yadav_012727dCommented
Author, you use determination everyother para. Try coming up with something else to show emotions please. It’s getting frustrating and irritating !!
As I stood up and walked towards them, the last rays of sunlight shimmered across the training grounds, creating a sense of hope and determination that seemed to resonate with my decision. - Rishabh_Yadav_012727dPosted
Can i ask you something author, I can understand that you like to give your MC a lot of plot armor, and i mean a lot or maybe all the time…., and i am okay with that, but cant you keep some hidden move or secret power in the MC which only the MC knows and not anyone else. I mean , in all the part of the story , everything is known about the MC to everyone , every move he makes , every power he has , etc. its like , he is not an MC but some character dancing like a puppet in someones hand all the time in the novel. He doesn’t even use his knowledge of fairy tale in the story for his advantage. It’s really frustrating . I like you writing quality a lot , but create a plot for the story is not your strong suit. Also his emotions, they change on drop . He feels like mentally challenged and not the type with terrible past, but actually genuinely emotionally challenged person!! I love your other work on the marvel and other story.. keep up the good work … I read your story because of your impeccable writing quality.. don’t loose that!! Thanks and best of luck!!
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Head instead of brain!!
He shook his brain to stop the flashback and Hermione and he both turned to see the photograph on the table. He saw that the image depicted an elderly man whose white beard and hair gave away his obvious advanced age. - Rishabh_Yadav_01271mthCommented
We get it ……HE IS YOUR BEST FRIEND…..you don’t have mention it every time!!
At night, Chu Zhou and his best friend, Dong Wende, came to the cafeteria for a "feast" again. His Attribute Points increased by another 0.45. - Rishabh_Yadav_01271mthCommented
We get it…HE IS YOUR BEST FRIEND…You don’t have mention it everytime!!!!
Dong Wende was stunned for a moment before muttering, "Oh right, I almost forgot that you're an Advanced Apprentice. The digestive system of an Advanced Apprentice is much stronger than that of Beginner and Intermediate Apprentices. It's not a big deal even if you eat a little more. But isn't this still too much!" Chu Zhou ignored his best friend, Dong Wende, and started eating. - Rishabh_Yadav_01271mthCommentedCh 1 "Talent" Awakened, Take Off!
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He has not done anything in biotech…. Only pure biology !!!
The international academic community called him the Prince of the biotechnology field. With time, there would be no limit on his potential! - Rishabh_Yadav_01271mthCommented
Make up your mind ….. keep either biology or biotechnology !!!
Thus, at nine years old, Lin Qiye's papers caused a stir in the field of biotechnology. - Rishabh_Yadav_01272mthCommented
Impolite *
No, no, no, I can't be so unpolite, I don't want to bring trouble to my doors. - Rishabh_Yadav_01273mthCommented
Maybe use darkness
The night cloaks the sky filling it with blackness, - Rishabh_Yadav_01273mthCommented
I hate this excuse very much.
“Mom, that day when Li Xin injured me to the point of blacking out, I had a very strange dream. In my dream, I met an old man, who taught me the formula to a type of medicinal liquid,” he casually made up an excuse. - Rishabh_Yadav_01273mthCommented
Mic*
Liam was an old man around 60 years old with white hair which seems to be falling with the passage of time. He was around 6 feet wearing a black suit with a dark blue tie and an expensive watch. When he took over the mike, the crowd went silent for some time. - Rishabh_Yadav_01274mthReplied to fgzhtsp
But he was blessed as stigma from multiple gods
Since the gods cannot enter the fight by themselves and destroy the arrogant Emperor, they did this by blessing stigma and a child was born carrying the God of blood who was later hailed as the God-king. - Rishabh_Yadav_01274mthCommented
Working and making games aside….. he called himself a gamer because… and I quote "I played flappy bird for hours" …..playing that idle mobile game and he calls himself a gamer🤣🤣🤣🤣
Math chuckled, placing his hands in his pockets and sighing. "It's challenging, but fun. I like this world. I consider myself a bit of a gamer, as I used to play Flappy Bird during my free hours. I might not be as skilled as a gamer, but I know a lot about games from my previous job at a gaming company." - Rishabh_Yadav_01275mthCommented
Claws of wolf or any beast or animal for that matter, are curved. He can’t just turn them into arrow head ….even if he has all the knowledge bows and arrows. I mean he can do it if he is given blacksmith tools or heating mechanisms….. but come on he doesn’t have anything. I mean him making small curve daggers can be understandable but arrow..not possible with any kind of knowledge without any tools .. and he doesn’t have any such tools!!
Then, Liu Yan cut off the steel claws on the wild wolf king's corpse and made arrowheads.detailGlobal Towers: Starting With The SSS-Rank Talent, God-Tier ExtractionFantasy · Light Tower Ascension