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BleachedKage5x03dCommentedThese last three paragraphs are completely redundant
As the two faced off, the deck of Buggy's pirate ship was littered with the unconscious bodies of Buggy's crew, each one felled by Zoro in their earlier confrontation. Though they were all alive, their groans of pain and discomfort added to the tense atmosphere. Zoro and Nami had left to search for the map to the Grand Line and Buggy's treasures, leaving Goku to deal with Buggy alone.- BleachedKage5x021dCommented
Wasn't it Snargaluff last chapter?
Reluctantly releasing the plant, Irina turned her gaze back to Sprout. "It's alright, Professor. Next, let's see the Chinese Chomping Cabbage!" - BleachedKage5x021dCommented
It should be Flamel instead of Grindelwald
The amount of magic Lynn had tapped from the Philosopher's Stone to fuel that overpowered Protego was comparable to what he expended creating an alchemical formation by using his wand in place of an engraving knife. Recalling Grindelwald's estimate that he would need to reach fourth-year level before attempting that feat wandlessly, Lynn could extrapolate that the immense magical power required likely matched the average fourth-year's reserves. - BleachedKage5x021dCommented
In my humble opinion Fiendfyre is many times more dangerous than any of the Unforgivables. The terrible three are all single target spells thar require line of sight. Ff on the other hand is an AoE attack that has a tendency to go out of control and feeds on magic.
Fiendfyre, being very powerful dark magic only slightly less dangerous than the Unforgivable Curses, was something even Lynn's mentor Professor Green refused to teach him, despite his great control over fire. The lure of dark magic was too risky, even for Lynn, his only student and final hope. - BleachedKage5x021dCommented
This would be embarrassing for anyone not jut dimension hoppers
Being killed by one's own magical plant would be embarrassing for a dimension traveler! - BleachedKage5x022dCommentedHarkon was officially on a countdown, and I couldn't wait to put his pathetic ass into the ground. I have more important shit to worry about than an uppity vampire with a god complex after all...
- BleachedKage5x024dCommentedFaster than he could blink, or otherwise react, Gelebor found himself flying through the air, my armored gauntlet leaving a bloody print on his face.
- BleachedKage5x026dCommentedVoslaarum and Naslaarum shared one quick look, nodded, and bolted the fuck out of there.
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This should be impossible as it is mandatory to take at least 2 electives. 3 are recommended. More than that requires a time turner.
Therefore, in addition to the core seven classes of Transfiguration, Herbology, Defense Against the Dark Arts, Potions, Charms, Astronomy and History of Magic, Lynn only elected to take Ancient Runes. - BleachedKage5x027dCommentedThis was the Forest of the Menos Grande!
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2 typos here
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This paragraph is far too long. It should be split into three or four paragraphs at least to become more readable.
"When I was little, the Dursleys always let their anger out on me. The one who became violent was Vernon. Petunia only shouted at me and they all called me a freak. They told me it would have been better for everybody if I had just died with my parents in the car crash that they caused when they were drunk. Halloween was always the worst. Dudley paraded with all the sweets he got in the neighbourhood from trick or treating and rubbed it into my face that I wouldn't get a single sweet. The first time Vernon beat me with his belt that I remember was when I was five. Before all injuries were from him grabbing me too hard and shoving me into the cupboard under the stairs where I slept. He had been denied a promotion at work he had hoped for and got drunk and vented his anger on me. At school things didn't get better except that I was away from Privet Drive most of the time. When it was apparent that I was smarter than Dudley they forced me to not outdo him." Harry didn't know why all those words spilled out of him, but now that he had started he for some reason couldn't stop and he felt strangely safe in Sirius' arms, who was rubbing circles on his back. - BleachedKage5x027dCommentedCh 87 Chapter 87: Goodafternoon, Mr. Green
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there is a t missing
After another fifteen minutes of a tuorous climb, Naruto dropped heavily onto the cold, hard earth at the top and stared up at the crimson sky above him, then closed his eyes and fell completely unconscious. - BleachedKage5x01mthCommentedI swear, I could almost see the tears of despair in his eyes.
- BleachedKage5x01mthCommentedGetting off the ground I felt horribly off balance as my right eye was CONSIDERABLY more powerful than my left for some reason. 'Is this the aid it was talking about? Better vision? Seems kinda cheap right?' I thought confused. As it turns out I was counting my eggs before they hatched as there was far more to my new eye than I realized at this moment.
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I think writing letters was still fairly common in the early nineties.
After breakfast, Harry excused himself, citing the need to respond to some correspondence. In reality, he sought a quiet moment to reflect on Nicolas Flamel's offer and its implications. Nigel, ever ready with a comment, couldn't resist saying, "Correspondence? What are you now, a minister? Or perhaps planning to revive the lost art of letter writing?" - BleachedKage5x01mthCommented"Now that that is done..." I turn to those gathered with an ominous tinge to my voice, only to completely shift it into one of excitement "We party!"
- BleachedKage5x01mthCommentedYet just as he was about to reach the door, the entirety of the room burst into pieces, opening the tower up to the skies and giving him a full view of a massive black dragon flying away at full speed.
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If you already provide a number range don't add 'nearly' as well as it doesn't make sense and breaks the flow of the sentence.
In the middle of the dojo there was an Asian woman wearing a white and black track suit with a wooden sword in hand. There were nearly 5-6 kids sitting around the main platform looking at her and a 16-17 year old boy that was standing in the middle. The Asian woman tapped the boy's thigh and then his ankle and said "Your posture must always be perfect like this or else you won't be able to exert all your strength and won't be able to reposition yourself." All the kids nodded as they heard this. The woman looked at Maya and the others and pointed to the clock on the wall.