yadayada200028
I'm an enlightened individual who's just trying to do the things he loves before he dies ◉‿◉
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that's my girl right there
yep, I saw it coming.
This is where you know she's madly in love and she's going to fall into depression soon lol
Most of the sentences are to show character interactions and help somewhat in character development. I try to make the paragraphs as short as possible but I'll try to shorten them more. Also, everything becomes better the more indepth you read. Thanks for the review, it helps me become better as a writer 😊❤️
sure.
use better punctuations
Descriptions and wordings need a bit more work.
what's with the comma?
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cliche
moan in pain?