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bezalel2yrReplied to ViperHeliosThe mushrooms become a talking point in later chapters (around chapter 32 in my backlog) and rest assured it'll be explained by then, but yeah, it does sound like a plot hole early on haha.
Jason swung his heavy hammer around. Nico danced around and mauled the goblins coming at him with his arm maces. Hena outputted constant heals to the two front liners, while Kai, Saira, and Kristine were picking off the goblins from the backline with sticky black blobs, explosive fireballs, and duplicating arrows.- bezalel2yrReplied to Luminous_Arcadian
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Everything's happening so fast HELP
Both men looked startled as I stood up getting a better look at the both of them. I blinked numerous times as I slowly confirmed that this wasn't a nightmare and there actually was a man burying his dick in my boyfriend's ass. - bezalel2yrReplied to Akira_Monadelle
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One of the best I've read in the site- and it fits my tastes too! I can picture the scenes vividly as if I was looking into an image, and the prose capture me into the story like a book really should. The pacing is wonderful, with a balance mix of descriptions, narrations, and dialogue. Overall it was a very good read. Keep at it!
- bezalel2yrReplied to evilmunky45
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It's a very good fiction. It stands out from the rest the website has to offer. The prose and style are very similar to that of a published book, which is good. The only thing keeping the story from its full potential would be the balance in showing vs telling a scene. The first two chapters are victims of this. Overall though, very great job! Keep at it!