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Rafael_Loki

Rafael_Loki

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2019-10-07 JoinedGlobal
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  • Rafael_Loki
    Rafael_Loki7mth
    Replied to Alan_Wafula

    Harem is always more interesting since it opens a lot of interaction options for the mc.Despise the non-harem cry, some of the best novels here are harem.It's always amusing to see the interaction of the wife's with different personalities and goals.

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    The Soul System in the Apocalypse
    Fantasy · Alan_Wafula
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  • Rafael_Loki
    Rafael_Loki9mth
    Replied to Aurel_Infinity

    It's a medieval world wo modern medicine. It could be called a disease and it would be right since they are limited by their scientific progress.

    Her personal tutor once told of a disorder called autism. After that, she kind of assumed that her brother had it.
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    Limitless Evolution: The Path To Immortality
    Fantasy · Animosity
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  • Rafael_Loki
    Rafael_Loki9mth
    Commented

    No

    { A/N - I wanted to ask for your input on the training arc. Please indicate with a
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    Surviving The Novel
    Fantasy · Shiroi_kage
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  • Rafael_Loki
    Rafael_Loki10mth
    Commented

    Cringe and out of character. It would be better if the old man was a little more mean to test mc mettle.He went all "I'm alfa and omega" for no freaking reason. lol

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    Surviving The Novel
    Fantasy · Shiroi_kage
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  • Rafael_Loki
    Rafael_Loki10mth
    Replied to Rafael_Loki

    Why the f the program broke all paragraphs and grouped it.

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    I become the badass villain
    Realistic · Dufort_Yeager
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  • Rafael_Loki
    Rafael_Loki10mth
    Posted

    The writing style is to frustrating to me. I can't even focus in the history. The author has too many amateur vices like the use of "..." and start all sentences with "He did x", "He saw y".History segment's crash with each other. There is no transition and everything is very descriptive without care for the text elegance. As general rule "x" is spoken dialogues, [x] is system or notification and 'x' is used for internal dialogue. There is no need to Express "he said" all the time when it will just brake the text.The review is not to discourage. I can see author is pretty new to it, but I think it's best to use this novel as a learning base so in the future you can make a more compelling history. PS: There are some calligraphy and styling sites to help fix text.PS2: My English comes from playing RPGs as a kid so I don't think it's particularly good.

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    I become the badass villain
    Realistic · Dufort_Yeager
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  • Rafael_Loki
    Rafael_Loki10mth
    Commented

    Wait... he don't think for a second he will be stabbed and left to rot there? I hope to see his personality improve somehow. He's far too childish and simple minded for my taste.Come on, show us your old man wisdom. You are not even an isekai teenager.

    Ch 44 Stalking Zephyr (2)
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    Rebirth of the Ruined Noble
    Fantasy · Emberlight
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  • Rafael_Loki
    Rafael_Loki10mth
    Commented

    what useless chapter, just to show a old mercenary with a brain smaller than a kid.

    Ch 43 Stalking Zephyr (1)
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    Rebirth of the Ruined Noble
    Fantasy · Emberlight
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  • Rafael_Loki
    Rafael_Loki11mth
    Posted

    MC is pain in the ass. After 8 chapters I can't handle this plot. It's the same old formula, but the system just explains about everything. MC 23:59 - It's a new free life and I don't need to hate the manipuled heroines. MC 00:00 - I'm vengeance. I'll take everything and treat them as prostitutes. And fuck you system that gave me freedom.

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    Supreme Villain: Seducing the Heroines
    Fantasy · Duke_Asmodeus
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  • Rafael_Loki
    Rafael_Loki1yr
    Replied to iLhamzki

    Lux... he stinks with harem aura. Well, I just hope to see Zio with a strong pair, not some damsel in distress.

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    The Unrecorded Extra
    Fantasy · iLhamzki
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  • Rafael_Loki
    Rafael_Loki1yr
    Replied to iLhamzki

    so far looks like the hero of the book will have a harem. I hope not bc that defeats the no-harem tag. And it's kind annoying to read about non mc harem. It's harem with extra steps.

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    The Unrecorded Extra
    Fantasy · iLhamzki
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  • Rafael_Loki
    Rafael_Loki1yr
    Replied to Wirlebennovel

    yeah. Chap 14 and idk if I will keep reading. He was supposed to be smart but don't know shit and want to sell legendary items that could help him for just money, something that he can get hunting monsters. It's frustrating to read. 10 chapter of battle to have mc just have stuff handed to him bc he can't use his brain.

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    Requiem Of A Failed Hero
    Urban · RighteousFilth
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  • Rafael_Loki
    Rafael_Loki1yr
    Commented

    It would be pretty interesting if the contigence is actually the fated heroes that work like trojan horse for the invasion. and all the other worlds in his other lives was destroyed after his death.

    Ch 27 CHAPTER 27: TO PURSUE OR NOT
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    DOOMED TO BE A VILLAIN
    Fantasy · Sphire1707
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  • Rafael_Loki
    Rafael_Loki1yr
    Posted

    Slime but wo everything that makes it great. The plot is rushed and convenient. I love harem, but the sequence of events are ridiculous and mc actions are nonsensical. I know that there is some profound plot behind his actions, but there is no build up to that plot. The reader is throw out of the loop far to many times and a "notes" chapter shouldn't be necessary to fill plotholes.

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    Reincarnated with an Analysis system.
    Fantasy · Kirito_K5
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  • Rafael_Loki
    Rafael_Loki1yr
    Replied to Cha0sTheory

    I like harem as long it's not a pokemon one where he gets a girl each 10 ch. I really like when heroines have their own history and sometimes even clash with the mc. As a royal makes more sense I guess.

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    Building your own super empire from scratch
    Fantasy · DaoistpjUWEL
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  • Rafael_Loki
    Rafael_Loki1yr
    Posted

    I'ts bad. I can't understand the 5 star reviews. -name of mc keeps changing. -mc has high intelligence status, but it's a dumbest mf I ever see. -mc is 5y old with no cheat yet is thrown in a dungeon wo any reason. -mc don't remember a single thing from the novel he wrote, not even the freaking skill of major characters. - it's riddled with plotholes. seriously... rich lady in poor orphanage jus because her parents can't take care of her sometimes? ffs. - 3y old kids that behave like 12y and can run like the wind. - mc that after almost 3y think he still in a dream and will return home anytime now. - Not a single world building. There is guild, portals and monsters, but nothing that is shown because we need to follow the mc in some of the most mundane and brain dead adventures - There is much more, but whatever. The worse part is that the plot has potential, but is extremely wasted for a apparent lack of planning and editing. Also the author posted the same chap 2 times, effectively cutting part of the history. I usually just ignore novels I don't like, and I really like the premise. It's sad to see it wasted.

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    Surviving as the Second Main Lead: Second Lead's POV
    Fantasy · daygonyuuki
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  • Rafael_Loki
    Rafael_Loki1yr
    Commented

    makes no sense. orphanage was poor and now it has a rich young lady? And 2 toddlers with 3y that behave like 12y... I'm missing something or this novel is full of plotholes? u.u

    Ch 31 Ch 29: A bad encounter [pt1]
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    Surviving as the Second Main Lead: Second Lead's POV
    Fantasy · daygonyuuki
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  • Rafael_Loki
    Rafael_Loki1yr
    Posted

    A much better version rn. MC was to innert and unimportant in the other novel. I hope he keeps the focus and autonomy this time.

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    Not-So an Extra
    Fantasy · Admirably_
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