Review Detail of Rafael_Loki in I become the badass villain

The writing style is to frustrating to me. I can't even focus in the history. The author has too many amateur vices like the use of "..." and start all sentences with "He did x", "He saw y".History segment's crash with each other. There is no transition and everything is very descriptive without care for the text elegance. As general rule "x" is spoken dialogues, [x] is system or notification and 'x' is used for internal dialogue. There is no need to Express "he said" all the time when it will just brake the text.The review is not to discourage. I can see author is pretty new to it, but I think it's best to use this novel as a learning base so in the future you can make a more compelling history. PS: There are some calligraphy and styling sites to help fix text.PS2: My English comes from playing RPGs as a kid so I don't think it's particularly good.