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This is one of the danmachi stories that made me intrested in the sea of trash ideas. Future Rudeus deserve happiness he lost due Hitogami. But the Author wrote the character , not like he is Rudeus at all, it could be any reborn person not showing Rudeus speacil characteric the overwolming magic power and as well magic knowladge and more are kind of added to character like cheat, not part of the character as Rudeus. the Author took the point of conflict in the character in the first chapter preventing character devolpment as well close up as Rudeus. in first place the anime is about him overcoming the fears and trauma as shut in and fat loser, in his second life, so third life should be smilliar conflict.
Because he have limitation it cost him LP which is his life.So if he waste them all he will die, and the skills you said to give him costing too much
I have to say I liked the fanfic even though I normally don't like Yuri, the writing is really good giving the fitting vibes.How do you develop her potential romance members along with her being able to give Falna is interesting.But still, I have a few points I would like the Author to take a look at.1. I appreciate you keeping close to the original Shalltear abilities that were written in fandom but sure those abilities aren't all she has so you could add spells or skills that feat vampire or job class,2. She is level 100 as such she and all other guardians have the skill to null all attacks from low-level weapons (not to mention even without it nothing should hurt her).3. I don't get what is her motive to conquer Orario as she doesn't see herself as a superior species to rule over such weak members.In any case, continuing to write you have a good story with good writing,
This isn't the cloth he where right now but this his appearance
She could just use a control Anemia spell on both of them
Obviously but he doesn't know it he only saw the anime what he knows is just what is written in wiki and even that he doesn't remember
I like she make herself familiar with new abilities but misaka main way of fighting is electricity, she could summon thunder to make nomu dust or use a railgun to pierce his brain, or just destroy it with millions of volt . You could see when she attacked touma when she attempt to sucide than she could make a bridge greatly damaged I doubt nomu could survive it
The Author doesn't make any sense in his story, if you choose Gojo Satrou's power the mc should be op. Monsters can affect spaceđđ He is strong and talented yet nobody notices him including exclusive . I really couldn't read it longer as it was painful to eyes and brain. Author read wiki of both Danmachi and Jujutsu kaisen if you use elements from both.
What I seek is logic, if he is this much strong then he should be in the main force even if he is level 4. Also, he should go with them in their travel to the deep floors. Also way in 6 years he doesn't know anyone with his talent he should at least be known as Ais rival which should attract some people to talk with him
Thank you for the chapter! I have to say this is the greatest Danmachi I have ever read, this only shows the effort and quality of the author. I have a few things to ask or suggest can you make the Mc bring more technology to the world? I feel mc has focused too much on his leveling up and becoming stronger but he stopped creating new things such as armor or weapons. Will silver's harem get bigger? Would he have new abilities such as mind control or time stop? Would he make a contract with spirit? Also, you could bring more research in genetics as it would be interesting if he could absorb things like elve's lifespan or enhanced senses of demi human.
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You don't mean you drop this novel right?
I rarely write but I see, it bothers people that the name of the fanfic is in dxd with useless Longious, so at some point, I would have to make it useless. Why did I make him strong to begin with? Because I had to give him some powers in another way than the cliche way from the system's higher being. For those who came to read cliche fanfic of overpowered character who has everything goes the way they want then go to another place. I plan to have a real story of life for someone reborn in dxd, life is hard having many difficulties but we have to overcome them, this is the story of my Mc. For those who don't like the idea please leave without leaving bad comments or reviews because it lowers my motivation. For those who stay I promise unique and interesting fanfic of high school dxd.