Thanks for an honest feedback, appreciate it. 👍

"As the Oracle's Aid in the Fallen Realm" takes readers on a captivating journey into a mysterious world. Thel Yoki's arrival in a realm governed by enigmatic laws introduces us to a chilling landscape inhabited by alien beings, dark-winged maidens, and angelic figures with a sinister edge. As a mortal blessed with an unusual form of immortality, Thel's struggle to coexist with these entities adds depth to the narrative. In so far I like the premise of the story as well as the character designs. Would recommend it to anyone looking for a satisfying and enjoyable read.

I recommend to use a method called Show, Don't Tell. Rather than stating how a character or place feels, show it through actions, dialogue, and vivid descriptions. For example, instead of saying "She was sad," you could write, "Her shoulders slumped, and her gaze remained fixed on the rain-soaked window, as if searching for solace amidst the gray clouds." It is more of a stylistic choice of writing for me but i think you can use it to your advantage

just read the first prologue. I liked the whole concept of the story and I already got hooked in first read so I added it to my collection 🥰.So Here's my suggestion. I'm a person who likes feeling the ambience of a scene so I would recommend to incorporate a detailed or just a brief description of where, when, and what is the setting of the whole scene just to emphasize the vibe it embodies whether it is calm, chaotic, or whatever. but put a little grain of salt on this cause Im just starting to write novels so, yeah 🥴😆

I think it's a great backstory, it introduces the motivation of the main protag [img=recommend]

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