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0vrLrd71

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My senior quote was "Do they expect me to write something? Yeah, no." That's pretty cringe, should have actually thought it out, instead of giving one on the spot, that should say something about me..

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  • 0vrLrd71
    0vrLrd711mth
    Commented

    haha, imagine if it's not her head

    I sat down next to her on the bed, put my hand where her head was and began to stroke it lightly.
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    Fantasy · NunuXD
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  • 0vrLrd71
    0vrLrd711mth
    Replied to Dragaim

    pay p @l, koffee, subscribestar or something, etc, it could be any of them

    When I sent my virtual account for the transfer, Werewolf transferred it without a second thought, leaving me a little surprised at how easily this person trusted me, but I didn't care much and took advantage of the time left to start this artwork.
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    Fantasy · NunuXD
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  • 0vrLrd71
    0vrLrd711mth
    Replied to OnlyGoodStuff_1

    Okay, who that

    Today I'm going to walk 5 km in 1 hour. I thought resolutely as I started to run.
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    Fantasy · NunuXD
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  • 0vrLrd71
    0vrLrd711mth
    Commented

    the censor got better at shadow banning comments

    There, now I knew what I had to do to make money fast. If there was one thing I remembered from my previous world that shocked me, it was a girl in my class who made a lot of money just by drawing animal characters to sell on Twitter, apparently she sold each drawing for at least $100... what was it called? Furra, Furre, Furry! I can start selling these artworks for $30, which will help a lot to pay for the things I need in the beginning, but if I gain fame, I can raise this price in the future!
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    Fantasy · NunuXD
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  • 0vrLrd71
    0vrLrd711mth
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    If the dad gets a decent place as a new job they'll probably let him work at home most days if he has a decent computer set up, except when he needs to be in person at the office - that way the mother can also worry less and get a job if she really wanted to

    With a disapproving smile, Lauren looked into the camera as she sighed. "He's only doing this because I can't work... I've tried everything, but since Ethan was born, I can't take my mind off things for a second, thinking that the kids at home might be in trouble, and I don't know anything about working from home..."
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    Fantasy · NunuXD
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  • 0vrLrd71
    0vrLrd711mth
    Commented

    wow dude, you really are a psycho, first straight up reacting to a minor bullying with straight up intent to harm, and then this? I would have thought you would at least give it a skim over to get ideas as to how to use your system, its always a good source whenever you wanted to learn or create techniques, powers, and/or moves

    I didn't like this stuff anymore and it would just gather dust in my room, since my parents probably don't have the money to give me to buy a guitar, I can get rid of it and get what I want.
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    Fantasy · NunuXD
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  • 0vrLrd71
    0vrLrd711mth
    Commented

    this really broke the immersion, honestly it could be easily edited to make it seems like it's a small pov shift and showing her thoughts and a couple mumbles and it'll flow better than whatever this is

    Until she finally cracked a smile. "Even though he was scary, I have to admit, he seems to have become cooler after acting like that, I've never seen him like that."
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    Fantasy · NunuXD
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  • 0vrLrd71
    0vrLrd711mth
    Replied to Space_kook

    "What subjects?"

    Now at Noah's school, not only does he not have many friends, but his friends are clumsy people who don't know how to talk properly, they only talk about subjects that I don't really care about, and to make matters worse, the 'bullies' at this school still pick on him.
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    Fantasy · NunuXD
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  • 0vrLrd71
    0vrLrd711mth
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    Okay. I dont have experience with this so I always feel weird when reading about bullies in high-school or middle school, I guess that's just so unrealistic to me that it's weird

    Now at Noah's school, not only does he not have many friends, but his friends are clumsy people who don't know how to talk properly, they only talk about subjects that I don't really care about, and to make matters worse, the 'bullies' at this school still pick on him.
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    Fantasy · NunuXD
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  • 0vrLrd71
    0vrLrd711mth
    Commented

    should change out it to his, "to make /it/ his* like mine"

    When Ethan came downstairs and saw my hair, his shock was as great as my mother's, but unlike her, who was shocked and concerned, Ethan just got excited when he saw my hair and asked me to make it like mine.
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    Fantasy · NunuXD
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  • 0vrLrd71
    0vrLrd711mth
    Commented

    less anger and more irritation, it's not easy to truly become angry unless one has issues, plus the interaction beforehand was less something to be angry at, and more irritated, vexed, or annoyed, since it's just a typical sibling moment

    Instead of the anger she was showing Noah at that moment, Olivia had a slightly surprised expression on her face as she sat on the sofa and looked into the camera.
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    Fantasy · NunuXD
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  • 0vrLrd71
    0vrLrd711mth
    Commented

    this is what I mean, you could have used this as a point where she interacts with Noah as a way to show that the family dynamic is getting better or to demonstrate more depth for a character but you relegated it to side commentary that didn't really progress character relationships

    "Even though I was worried about him, just seeing the confidence he showed made me so proud, and the reassurance he gave me, like everything was under control when he cut his hair, really convinced me!" She said excitedly.
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    Fantasy · NunuXD
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  • 0vrLrd71
    0vrLrd711mth
    Commented

    I don't like this honestly, it isn't a sitcom or reality TV show, or even total drama, it doesn't fit the type of story this is , plus it's like a cheap way to give info (even if in character thoughts) without putting as much effort into a cohesive story- dont get me wrong, you have good writing, but I just think these section break the narrative and immersion

    -------- Lauren Commentary --------
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    Fantasy · NunuXD
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  • 0vrLrd71
    0vrLrd711mth
    Commented

    wow dude, she barely worried and you are already close to snapping at her? calm tf down

    "Mom, calm down. I didn't hurt myself, my hair is fine, nothing bad happened, you know? There's nothing to worry about, I watched a lot of videos before you did this to me. Now calm down, okay?" I said in a serious voice as I put my hands on her shoulders and spoke in a calm tone.
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    Fantasy · NunuXD
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  • 0vrLrd71
    0vrLrd711mth
    Commented

    uhm... I think you need to edit that sentence at the end

    Honestly, they were the two most difficult people in the house to deal with, both my mother with her perfectionism and Olivia with her self-centeredness, and it got even worse when she went to high school, as she joined the popular group while I was one of the outcasts, which drove us even further apart, as she probably felt that I was a better person than her.
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  • 0vrLrd71
    0vrLrd711mth
    Replied to VoteRat

    maybe a mix?

    | Charisma (CHA): 3
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    Fantasy · NunuXD
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  • 0vrLrd71
    0vrLrd711mth
    Replied to TheUltimateP1e

    ooookay? sorry for having opinions and commenting them in a place specifically for them

    "I'm not the one who should be explaining here!" He said springing up to his feet before poking my armour. "You're the one who's going to have tell me why your armour is glowing like that and flowing with magical energy? And what exactly is it made of? I've never seen this metal before." He suddenly looked off to the side like he was daydreaming about something. A faint blush came over his olive skin. "Maybe, just maybe SHE'S never seen this metal before. If I brought her this, it would make her super excited."
    Orario Records of Bastard Cheating Minecrafter
    Anime & Comics · Vulkizaro_Zoromi
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  • 0vrLrd71
    0vrLrd711mth
    Replied to DaoofShamelessness

    I know there's a few, I have the nsfw thread watched so I got notification when one was created, but it's been so long since they've updated that I don't remember them

    A/N: Yes, they did do the culture dance if you were wondering.
    Soul Land 3: Legend of the Jade Emperor
    Anime & Comics · IHaveNthToDo
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  • 0vrLrd71
    0vrLrd711mth
    Replied to TheFoolishKing2152

    No, all might was pretty fking compatible to OFA and he was buffed too, so besides his strength being boosted there wasn't any change, it was like it was natural for him, unlike with deku and how he gets that lightning and red veins to show he is using the quirk (and how it's an active component for izuku unlike how it was a passive quirk for all might till his injury

    Even All Might, the strongest hero in this country, didn't wear a mask.
    MHA: Living as Mineta is hard
    Anime & Comics · akikan40
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  • 0vrLrd71
    0vrLrd711mth
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    Yeah, this is pretty small for a farm, that's usually the size for medium to the bigger smaller mansions backyards

    The farm itself aside from the house is actually just as big as a football field. It wasn't big but for a simple hobby, it was more than enough
    My Farm System: Reaching The Top In The Parallel Earth!
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