ArashiTenebris
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ArashiTenebris16dReplied to goldgodking_132Sauce please ?
[And don't you forget it.] Said Dragon proudly proclaimed.- ArashiTenebris1mthCommented
This and the previous paragraph feel a bit disconnected here, it like they are in the middle of doing something while sitting then suddenly she already move to the foor without clear indication here (I mean the impression and flow)
"Where are you going?' The woman pushed an empty seat near us with her foot, blocking me from leaving. "Do you believe I would let you go so easily?" She raised a challenging eyebrow. - ArashiTenebris2mthReplied to Drogoth
What the name of this old manga, btw ? it was fun to read but I forgot it
"And you just jinxed it." Izzy said without a hint of hesitation. - ArashiTenebris2mthCommented
That show something about the mc not learning (despite it slap on his more than than one time) that even a supposed ancient goddess are more savvy than him…..
"And you just jinxed it." Izzy said without a hint of hesitation. - ArashiTenebris3mthReplied to Zuch
Her picture are literally above your guy comment there, btw
"The second one was a…woman with silver hair. She dressed like a normal human woman with no noticeable Reiatsu." Bazz-B was the one who spoke up. I turned my head to him and he shuddered under my gaze. "S-she was the one who fought Nodt. When your Majesties' shadow was sent to retrieve us…" He clenched his jaw. - ArashiTenebris3mthCommented
Really ? It fine to exaggerate and use cliche’, but it feel like you over exaggerate most of the time here (mostly the real life part of story) that end up make the story less good, so try to use them strategically, please (it like you made cheese cream on cake fo other, but if it like 90% cream and 10% cake, then have them every breakfast, lunch and dinner then they will get sick of it real quick even if they like cheese) Hope it give you idea for the possible problem, I will read to at least end of volume 1 then to see if those problem still there or not
"Alright, that's it…! I-I cannot bear this anymore!" Muttered one of the girls within her friend group. A beautiful blonde girl with aquamarine eyes and hair made into twin tails clicked her tongue. If one looked at her some more, they'd notice that she had quite a matured body, a big chest that struggled keeping itself tightly beneath her shirt, and wide hips. She was another of the Class Goddesses, although a lesser one compared to Elena. - ArashiTenebris3mthCommented
Yeah, still have thing grind my gear with the fact she still ‘pure’ despite already have husband and got a daughter there, So there better a good reason in later chapter there
Mark sighed in relief internally, as he realized that he was staring at her way too much. Thankfully, Elayne was very innocent and had quite a pure mind, she often never thought that they watched her for her looks and thought that it was always something else. - ArashiTenebris3mthReplied to xLeafx
Unless there are like only less than 3 woman who try so far and not thought about it, it indeed weird
"Well, it's the first time a woman has ever called me cute… But don't worry about it," He said. - ArashiTenebris3mthCommented
Then the reality of that japan society’s will disappoint him a lot
I quickly put up some clothes for today, some jeans that were a bit too tight on my butt… And a white blouse, the rest were just fluffy coats to cover myself from the cold of the morning. When I walked outside my room, I found my little princess boiling some water to make herself a coffee. She was dressed in her black and white school uniform. It was not at all like the Sailor Uniform from anime girls that my husband liked, which I remember used to disappoint him, he was always saying "we should have moved to Japan while we could!" even though he hadn't learned any Japanese. - ArashiTenebris4mthReplied to TheSage110
Where this character from, btw ?
"Not at all." I gave her a quick pat on the head. - ArashiTenebris4mthCommented
So I guess they use the meat growed in lab type, which help reduce the prices and easier to access here ?, Because those salmon are quite expensive
After that long day, I logged out from the game and realized it was already 7PM! I quickly hurried back to the bathroom, spent twenty minutes there and then ran out to prepare dinner. I decided to make some rice with fried salmon, which we had quite a bit in the freezer. The pieces of salmon fried with some butter and some spices were always nice, the fluffy white rice, some veggies, and ready! It was a simple dinner, but at this hour we didn't eat that much to begin with. - ArashiTenebris4mthCommented
How about the blade like the Tree heros in warhammer fantasy ?
"No… Maybe make a Staff?" The tree suggested. . - ArashiTenebris4mthReplied to xLeafx
At least those cooking do help extend the village life there, though you still have the point
There were a lot of items that could be Gathered, but for that I needed the time, and we didn't have time to go leisurely picking up special medicinal flowers or mushrooms when our mission was to save the squirrel folk from death. - ArashiTenebris4mthReplied to PancakesWitch
That quite a lot. Btw I have a questions (just wondering), why chapter 22 look so messy despite your claim to already edit it ?? (though I hear that webnovel don't have edit option after you already release the chapter ?). And why not mention that in the start of chapter comment so to prevent all that messy drama with other new reader later ?
Ch 1 Brand New Life Online - ArashiTenebris4mthReplied to PancakesWitchCh 15 Fishing Can Give Me EXP?! And A New Plant Companion!
- ArashiTenebris4mthCommented
ah yeah, this would be more reasonable than making typical 'everyone are dumb except the mc' cliche
"Ah… I-I see… I guess it is not as incredible as I thought." I sighed.