Alanray64
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Kinda overkill from the get go. He should be forcussing on survival stuff not petty revenge. This scene just did nothing to make the MC interesting or anything. Uncalled for element added. He be truly screwed if he had returned to an alternate timeline but hey it’s all for drama.
With those words, he stepped back and swung his knife. A head rolled off. Flicking off the blood stains on his clothes, he casually lit a cigarette and continued to lean against the railing, waiting for the apocalypse to arrive. Having just killed someone, even his own girlfriend, Noah felt not the slightest ripple in his heart, as if the cold body on the ground had nothing to do with him, maintaining a lazy, indifferent demeanor. It was only a slight sense of enlightenment that touched him. - Alanray641dReplied to Jedai_Finn
True, vessel is also a container, i had forgotten this, however vassal is probably the word the author meant, though branch is also ok.
Something you'd expect from the children of vessel families. - Alanray641dCommented
Seriously ? Where’s Waldo I’m betting 😂
"Hmm? Where did Wally go?" - Alanray642dCommented
Then picking up his stuff, he wishes to leave..
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Me thinks you forgot to translate this from Indonesian.
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…can you dismiss that…
Taking a deep breath, trying to calm herself down, and then back to her words "Although I'm not very good at magic, the Robins family is a family of witches that have existed for a long time ago, so as a member of the family I've met plenty of witches and none of them have as pure magic as you have, at first I thought you Were a dragon that kills my student then pretend to be him so I was a bit afraid but seeing your mana flow I dismissed that thought immediately, cause what I know about the dragon is their attribute was chaos so their mana flow will be the same...I have given you my answers,s-so can you dismissed that fire...hehe" M.s Hannah says, look up at him trying to look cute. - Alanray642dCommented
He is such a narcissist
"I don't like it, I don't like being fed romance, I don't like being the third wheel!" Ye Fan said.detailRecently Dumped by Gold-Digger, Goddess Asked Me to Sign a Birth Consent FormUrban · Silly Little Bok Choy - Alanray642dCommented
Have to say it but what a stupid woman. Seriously she is thick as two bricks to trust this guy.. such drama.
Ch 126 Chapter 109: Simple, I Promise You [Subscribe Please, Long Chapter, Over 4000 Words]_2detailRecently Dumped by Gold-Digger, Goddess Asked Me to Sign a Birth Consent FormUrban · Silly Little Bok Choy - Alanray642dCommented
Bai Susu saw the intense…. Little hard to see your own eyes unless in a mirror
This time, Zhao Xiaotian saw the intense love in his eyes.detailRecently Dumped by Gold-Digger, Goddess Asked Me to Sign a Birth Consent FormUrban · Silly Little Bok Choy - Alanray642dReplied to Jedai_Finn
Vessel is a boat/ship, vassal is subordinate or branch famiky if you like.
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It’s hard to give this novel a fair assessment as it is obviously from a non speaking English writer. My criticism is that the author took no pains to seek a proofreader to assist him with this and instead relied on translated words which as we all know, does not give a fair result. A comment about his use of the word retard was used instead of regressed and his explanation was the translation had it as that. I found this novel a little to far fetched, more a wish fantasy if anything, everything just gets handed to him on a silver plate. I felt no connection to the Mc and in fact found him to be tiresome and to childish to take seriously. The novel appeared initially interesting however after trying to follow the story and combined with the terrible sentences/grammar, it died a quick death in my mind. Only advice to give is as mentioned before, proofreading is urgently required and then check again. Just wasn’t worth the time.
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Merried ? Married..
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..will not reply to him.. Sounds much better
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Get someone to proofread. That whole chapter made me wince with the reading issues.
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Bad grammar here
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Rare level…dont think it needs all caps though
[congratulations to the master for obtaining RARE-LAVEL ITEM 'weapon mastery-{skill}'] - Alanray642dCommented
Vassal families
Something you'd expect from the children of vessel families. - Alanray643dCommented
Thought they were all known by their ID numbers, yet this guy knows her name?
"Mia, right? Judging by your name, you should be a woman. It just so happens that I need a foot-washing maid here, so don't stay in City 22 anymore, come to City 25."