Though, maybe I misunderstood?

Fair enough, I guess. I'm not sure why you were so sarcastic about it, but thanks for the opinion. Tip: Work on comma usage: "Disagree. It only increased my ImMErSiOn." becomes "Disagree, it only increased my ImMErSiOn."

Thanks for the rec; I'm definitely checking this out if this series turns out to be a bust. 

I've sadly made the decision to drop, but I'm thinking about checking out your other stories; I've especially taken an interest in your Lookism series. Would you rate that story as being similar to this one (e.g., does it have a slower pacing, more character detail, etc.)? Thank you for answering my questions so far, despite my criticism *thumbs up.*

So, I'd sadly not recommend reading this: the story's pacing is absurd (seriously, this was just bad storytelling), the characters are about as bland as they come, scene and character description are almost completely absent, and the author is thinking about accelerating the pacing even more (I'm on chapter 13). I'm kinda annoyed that I got my expectations up when reading the first chapter; it had pretty good spelling, an enjoyable writing style, and was just... interesting. 

Literally anyone who'd feel natural. 

This!

Pretty good, but there's sadly not much to base an opinion on; from my perspective, he may as well be a blank slate for the reader. 

Quick question: how long do you think this book will be? I'm still slightly enjoying reading, but the pacing is making me pretty hesitant to continue. Does this eventually slow down? Or will this be the pace going forward? Thanks for the chapter.

Honestly, fair enough, lol. I get the mood. 

Not going to lie, I was kinda hoping for more of a buildup into the Jujutsu main story; right now, I can't help but feel like this has been slightly rushed or something. 

Who's speaking here? I'm personally assuming it's not Yuji, but the presence of the "..." above indicates that it's actually him speaking.

Huh, can't help but feel this disrupted the flow a bit. Though I guess this'll shift perspectives a lot. I'm not sure how this'll turn out style-wise, but I'm slightly hopeful they'll steadily become less intrusive. 

out of curiosity, why are you using < _____> to show dialogue in place of the commonly used quotes (i.e., "____").

any chance of this continuing?

Overall, I'd give this a try: the grammar and use of more complex sentences have steadily improved as the series progressed, the characters feel pretty genuine and believable, and the way it approaches the Naruto world adds depth and rounds out many aspects the anime/manga simply glossed over, and the combat is pretty great. Now, while I love all the aspects above, I have to say that the weakest part of this fiction is the writing style: MANY scenes are completely interrupted by inane monologuing or exposition on topics that should either be addressed in a previous scene or simply not talked about at all (e.g., the random interruption of a stealth mission in order to tell us how they acquired the driver of the carriage); this completely ruins the flow of the story and results in me skimming at least 25% of each chapter and generally being slightly annoyed at the many moments ruined—or at least negatively impacted—by the use of random fact dumping or unnecessary exposition (i.e., work more on the "show don't tell" rule of writing). Nonetheless, if the author works on this aspect, this could be one of the best Naruto fanfictions on the market. Though, seriously, please work on knowing what topics need to be made aware of and which can be skipped; this has made many sections of this story a bit of a slog to read through. Thanks for the great book, and I hope my review helps further your writing :)! _____________ Side note: you might also want to keep a lookout when it comes to repeated words; you seem to use many of the same words within the same paragraph or sentence, which results in the writing feeling amateurish and kinda stilted. For example (there are two): "He heard the footsteps grow closer until Orange-Mask ran past him. Takuma jumped Orange-Mask and threw an augmented punch towards the man's face. Orange-Mask ducked under the punch and stabbed out with his sword. Takuma dodged with a quick step back before going in with a counter augmented-punch." (CH_7.12) "The water tentacles snapped forward and wrapped themselves around Orange-Mask's wrists. Takuma pulled Orange-Mask toward him with the tentacles and went for a stab with a kunai. Orange-Mask resisted the pull, broke free from the tentacle's grasp, and pulled his sword up." (CH_7.12) These are simply two examples of what has happened in almost every chapter and is something I'm surprised no one's brought to the authors attention.

The biggest issue I have with the series is how much of a hard on the author has for the mc; this is mostly referencing how the author ALWAYS feels the need to explain how mysterious, cool, sexy, charming, or powerful victor is in the most... blatant and repetitive ways possible. Please tone it down a bit: I don't need to know how cool the mc is every chapter (I'm not exaggerating, this happens almost EVERY chapter past the 500's that includes the MC). I'll sill stick with it since it has a decent number of good qualities, but damn is the author kinda giving me secondhand embarrassment. Though, I will say that the alt. perspective chapters are pretty great. Also, please stop deleting reviews that are below 4*; it's disingenuous and kinda scummy.

Copy of my review from RoyalRoad: I feel that my edit suggestions comment on chapter one shows exactly why I'm dropping this: the kids at the ORFANAGE speak in an oddly formal manner, words are consistently missing, the story can't seem to settle on which tense to use and subsequently keeps switching between the past and present (it seems to be in the present tense, but the author has done a bad job of bringing out the potential of this writing style), the grammar is "Bleh" and results in a very stilted manner of storytelling, and finally, the author has not fixed any of the above issues despite people bringing this up through edit suggestions. Seriously, I feel like my feelings can be summed up by what I stated in chapter one: "This was terrible and needs a rewrite. I hope you continue to improve as time goes on." Overall, I'd not give this a try. Oh, and if you want further clarification on what about this story needs tweaking, go look at my extensive edit suggestions on the aforementioned first chapter. I'd also like to highlight a quote from yndrelbosch that sheds light on what many will feel when reading this book: "The plot is great, but umm... I'm kinda just rewriting it in my head as I read. Everything from word choice and placement to grammatical and spelling errors. Honestly, I've gotten rather adept at rewriting stories as I read them, the quality around RR never seems to be quite there ~~" Have a nice day.

"The need for immediate gratification is strong with this one." - Sun Tzu

Wow, that was really awesome! The last couple of chaps felt slightly disappointing/rushed in execution, but this one definitely hit home (though, I did find the monologues a bit... intruding (only word I can think of to explain it) at times). Either way, thanks for the chap and being a good sport when it comes to my critical review of the series; I've seen many who simply delete lower star reviews. Looking forward to the next book :).