56. Changes.
Hello everyone, I am back on this novel as I promised. According to our deal, I am going to start posting the new chapters here as well. But since there have been some changes in the story, I will leave a few snippets here for which chapters I have changed, so you can be on track without any issues. or you can check out the other book.
I have tried to show more of his talents along with world-building hidden here and there.
I have added a considerable amount of work as the story went from 123.77K to 163.88K.
Due to the amount of change, I can't just write the whole paras here.
Let's start. () This book Chapter Number.
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Chapter 1: A slightly important change, she dies before meeting Severus and was planning to leave Tobias after finding out that she could inherit the Prince family. (Chapter 1)
Chapter 2: Continuation of the tragedy. (Chapter 1)
Chapter 3: Same, he kills his father. (Chapter 2)
Chapter 4: A bit more in-depth detail of he took his mother to the graveyard and a major change. (Chapter 3)
Chapter 5: Continuation. With letters that his mother never sent to him. (Chapter 3)
Chapter 6: Same, duel happens. (Chapter 4)
Chapters 7 to 14: same with in-depth thoughts from Severus for his planning and the mana has been changed into Necro, matching his abilities. His eye abilities have changed as well. His power will have importance in the story later. Expansion on his physical change and why he is appealing to the general population. A well-connected character is introduced in chapter 14, who ties into the story. (Chapter 5 to Chapter 10)
Chapter 15: Continuation and end of the initial arc. A brief look into his thought process and exploration of his cunning side. (Chapter 10)
End of initial Arc.
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Chapter 16: The chapter is reworked and gives a proper introduction to Narcissa Black. Must read. (Chapter 11)
Chapter 17: The chapter is reworked for a proper introduction of Lily Evans. (Chapter 11)
Chapter 18 to Chapter 21: It was reworked to show a better and more believable punishment of the marauders. With an entirely different scenario that plays out the same but in a different way. A glimpse into an important character. (Chapters 12 and 13)
Chapter 22: A brand new chapter that shows the pain and guilt Severus has been suffering from. And the emotion that he bottled up through Occlumency turns into a mirror of sorts. In this time of pain, Narcissa is his dimming light. Expansion of their time together. (New)
Chapter 23: Same as before. (Chapter 13)
Chapter 24 to Chapter 26: A few changes. Not major just a bit of past Severus's past deeds. (Chapters 14 and 15)
Chapter 27: New chapter, major changes, a new character. A bit about the world and tie in about his abilities. Must read. Her name is Elara, a half-house elf. (New)
Chapter 28: A new chapter. A surprise by Severus to Lily on her birthday. (New)
Chapter 29: New chapter, a bit of hidden tie-ins, may be important for the future. And some changes in the behavior of Severus. (New)
Chapters 30& 31: He gets his subordinate but I have shown an expanded version of each character's introduction and a brief look into their personality. A new concept was introduced for their roles and their circumstances. (Chapters 16 to 18)
Chapter 32: New character, important one. One of the most important char for the future of Severus's Fate. A part reason for his motives to start an orphanage and the study club. Her name is Charlotte, she is 11, not a love interest. (New)
Chapter 33: Refined chapter that shows the conflict within Severus using Wizarding lore from Ancient India, a concept important for understanding Severus's character. (Nataraja, one of the supreme deities in Hinduism) (Chapter 19)
Chapters 34 to 39: Same as the before. From meeting MacDonald's family to the date. But have made changes so it is clear and more refined to give an understanding of Robert's character.
And the date has some changes, I have rewritten it with the same events but with better dialogues and actions that intensified the scenes.
League of Shadows is the same. (Chapters 20 to 24)
Chapters 40 to 43: It is a must-read, as here the scenario of the test set by Merlin is changed. Since the last one is too XianXia and Wuxia, I have introduced a new concept to test him that I could have written as a short novel if expanded giving a glimpse into Severus's past. But due to the limited words limited I imposed on myself, I had to just give a glimpse into them.
(The way to open the hidden Vault has been expanded, with many mythologies referred to here, those may be used in the future.)
(Dante's Inferno is the inspiration for this)
It is important for you to read this to get the progression Severus has gone through.
(Chapters 25 and 26)
Chapter 44: It is a mix of 2 or 3 chapters, that would have been just fillers. Making it more impactful by just giving a glimpse into other factors that watching the wizarding world right now. (Chapters 27 to 30)
Chapters 45 to 48: It is written better this time, without leaving any possible plotholes and not showing any canon characters out of character. (Chapters 31 to 38)
Character 49: Narcissa's past in one chapter. (Chapters 39 to 44) (A lot of changes happened in these chapters.)
Chapter 50: I removed the part where Severus listens to Cissy and Lily, it wasn't in parts with Severus's character and his trust in them. (Chapter 45)
Chapter 51: same as before, helps regulus. But a slight change that avoids the pothole. (Chapters 46 to 49)
Chapter 52 and Chapter 53: Must read, I have added a battle between 10 members Vs Severus. And I have shown Benjy's memories and his past in a better way.
(Chapters 50 to 55)
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I hope everyone can go through them, for a better understanding of the story. Not much has changed but just some important much need depth was added to the characters and their motivations.
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Meet you tomorrow.