Adeyanju_Faith
The plot-line is pretty interesting, and the story build-up is good. the teen romance aspects in the first two chapters is cute. but it does become a little confusing and tiring trying to separate the conversations from the rest of the story. do go back and re-edit your already uploaded chapters. this will make it easier for the readers to appreciate your story more. :)
Interesting novel, it's a good read but i'd like to point out a few flaws in it if you don't mind. First of all- You might want to edit your synopsis. Make it shorter, explain only the main things and not just everything, the rest is up to the reader to read and find out. Second- Try placing quotation marks in your conversation and indicate who is saying what. e.g "Why are you holding my bag?" Tina asked in surprise; Something like that. Third- Try to fix the structure of your sentence overall I hope you're not offended, am just pointing the things that if fixed would attract more readers. But do keep it up, your novel is interesting and fascinating and the fact that I've always had a thing for high school novels makes me more attracted to it. Added to my library~
Nice and fresh story l must say.... Loved the character tina and kunle... Also how kunle is in love at first sight kinda things... Its really satisfying... But one thing l must say is.... It is really confusing to read the dialogues as it is not seperate from the other expressions or the sentences..... You should have use apostophy ( " ) to seperate the dialogues.... Other than that everything is nice and interesting... Keep going...
You are an author who does not miss details. And she knows how to put them in writing... THE START-UP, is a very adolescent writing, with those emotional variants, with vivid dialogues and youthful reflections. With family care, from children to parents. From teachers to students. Between friends... and why not advance between lovers...