Sheizzcoldasice
I like the story so far. The plot seems to be interesting, although a bit generic. There's something about the writing that just feels wrong to me though. it's not the grammar, nor the punctuation... I think it might be the flow of the story, actually. I'm not sure... Like, some words that are used to connect sentences or different and following events, they just don't sit right.... It's a good read tho! Just a bit uncomfortable for me to read...