Hello! Author here. I am a new writer who is writing a original novel. I have read various and thought of writing a fan-fiction to improve my writing skills. NOW FOR THE FAN-FIC There will be no harem, sorry to disappoint harem lovers. Though there can be two wives depending on reader's demand. A poll will be conducted to decide that. I am writing a action novel with mix elements of fantasy and adventure. I have zero experience in writing romance and don't expect me to pull out cheesy romance out of nowhere, though I am currently reading some romance novels to learn, but that will not be the focus for this novel. As unnecessary romance and harem may f**k up the story and drastically reduce the quality of reading experiences. Thank you and stay tuned with me and also don't forget to check out my original Novel based on Indian Mythology with many legendary beings and powers.
Hmmm can't really write a review since I'm bad at describing things but I'll try. Well let's see, grammar, its ok, I don't have any problems with it. Update, well its stable so that's good. Story development, I don't know since I can't think of anything to say to this. Characters, they're not emotionless puppets so that's good. World background, the author I guess knows it so its good
Im mean theres some aspects that are good but the bad heavily out weigh the good, the authors goes on rants all the time, the Mc is an idiot i dont even understand how he got into med school, from this point of on don’t read if you dont want spoilers but i wouldn’t care if i was you. The mc on his FIRST DAY at the ninja academy put 4 FIVE YEAR OLDS! into a powerful genjutsu and traumatised them! Just because they wanted to pick a fight with him over his good looks, like come on you have the mentality of an ***** you should know traumatising KIDS! Is not the right thing to do and that that situation could have been handled very differently.
Not for me, dropped chater 23, i don't understand the need to make the Mc so OP from the beginning , lit's like if he was litteraly screaming "I'M DIFFERENT, I'M SMART, I'M GENTLE" non stop with his action and the story developpement , while saying "I'm totally normal" to other character. Sad , the concept of Madara's grandson could have been nice if he wasn't so stupidly OP from the start
the mc said he didn't want to attract attention specially danzo but as the story flows he didn't try not to attract danzo's attention and it's like he's walking and announcing that he's a genius., the mc is pretty strong but he didn't form a plan in the future specially when dealing with danzo. and it kinda irritate me.
I'm disappointed. The author doesn't seem to have a grasp of how to form a storyline well, and keeps mixing up details between the various time periods in the story. Good effort, but the story lacks draw. It seems to me like the new villains only exist to give a challenge to the OP MC, who is only OP 50% of the time. That being said, writing is tough and I do see talent in the author as a writer. The language is clear and the writing itself isn't bad at all. Improving your foreshadowing skills and solidifying your overall plot before writing anymore would be nice. It's also unnecessary to give the MC so many powers, when just a few of them are actually used. Study the manga a little more - and I'd suggest reading some of the fanfics on translatinotaku, to inspire you more. Thanks for the hard work!