WQ: 5
US: 3
SD: 1
CD: 1
WB: 3
I feel like either none of the constant complainers in the later chapters have left a review or they are getting deleted, but I figured I’d leave one just in case for those interested
The author is solid at writing an engaging and entertaining story. Grammar mistakes are negligible if there even are any, and the super long first chapter sets a very strong precedent for an amazing story. Except, it falls flat very shortly after for many reasons.
First up is the reference to changes due to the MCs birth during chapter 1. It can be inferred that just his existence in the world of GoT has caused a butterfly effect, which would mean we would be seeing some interesting developments. Well that was thrown away almost immediately as literally nothing meaningful changes.
Keep in mind that things do change. There are a few times where the MC feels like the third wheel in a conversation that was meant to be between two people in canon, and his inputs feel glossed over, but they weren’t too frequent like some fanfics out there.
The main issue is the main plot points in the story just don’t change, and the few times that it feels like the mc just speaking could change things, he decides to stay silent or lie or deflect in some way that keeps things the same.
Furthermore, and what killed the story for me, was that he had a very suspicious encounter with a woman who he spent the whole last 2-3 chapters disrespecting, and messing with her people, in his room alone, and offering him a drink as if they are friends when they have nearly been hostile to each other so far, and she is known to use poison as the mc is aware.
Now what does our mc do? He drinks the drink happily without even thinking about it, and becomes paralyzed and gets r*ped by the woman.
And to top that off he doesn’t get revenge either, he just leaves some edgy ‘leave me alone’ and ‘stay away from me’ at the end of the chapter and leaves the place without at least exposing the fact that she killed her husband, or was cheating on her husband, or r*ped him, or that her kid isn’t her husbands, etc.
It’s almost like the author enjoys sabotaging his own story just for laughs, and his authors notes after these things seem to confirm that.
Oh and he gets a dragon egg that’s supposedly his inheritance left by his mother, and immediately proceeds to tell anyone about it and gives it to Tyrion for a while and makes it seem like the egg is bonding with him rather than the mc. I’m almost positive the story won’t go that route, but the fact that the author is building it up that way for absolutely no reason is proof of just how self-sabotaging this story becomes
