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Mine Everlasting

Have you ever tried to read My Immortal and just couldn't get past the bad writing? Do you want to actually understand the insane plot? Welcome to Mine Everlasting, the longest My Immortal rewrite (as far as I can tell). Come enjoy meeting all your favorite characters from Harry Potter all over again, but this time they're goth and have none of the personality from the original canon! I'm here for you as I rewrite all of My Immortal to be intelligible. Inspired by My Immortal by Tara Gilesbie.

LemonxLark · Book&Literature
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15 Chs

Chapter 1- Hi My Name is Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way

"And I have long ebony black hair (that's how I got my name) with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like limpid tears and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (AN: if u don't know who she is get da hell out of here!). I'm not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he's a major fucking hottie. I'm a vampire but my teeth are straight and white. I have pale white skin. I'm also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England where I'm in the seventh year (I'm seventeen). I'm a goth (in case you couldn't tell) and I wear mostly black. I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there. For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots. I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow. I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining so there was no sun, which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them."

-My Immortal (2006)

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Under the curtain of dark clouds, the medieval castle imposed upon the skyline. Spires pierced the heavens, which were vacillating between wet snow and freezing rain. Although the castle commanded attention and the deluge was off putting to most people, groups of students and teachers still hurried about on the grass outside. They walked, heads bowed with various books and objects clasped to their chest, trying to move out of the rain as quickly as possible.

To me, the storm was relaxing for this time of year, and I enjoyed every moment standing in the downpour. Although I wasn't wearing a jacket or pants, I felt no chill as nearly frozen water melted into my black skirt, quickly saturating the thin fabric. A group of other students passed by, glaring my way, questioning why someone would be out in this weather unless necessary. I started back as icily as I could and made a rude gesture before turning back to the majesty of the sky.

Before I could worry about how drenched I was becoming, I noticed a young man with hair the color of winter sunlight calling to me from a window. He yelled my name again, clearly having been shouting for a while.

"Ebony!" He called once more, now realizing I had spotted him. I reddened slightly, realizing he had been watching me as I stared into the storm. He probably thought I was insane.

I waved and responded over the torrent, "Draco! What's up?"

Of course, at that moment, fate decided our conversation was not to be, and the class bell rang, interrupting his reply. He drew back and shrugged, clearly ending our quick conversation. I was still curious why he had yelled to me from out the window, especially in this weather, but I had no more chances to see him. Realizing I had to hurry to my own class, I spotted a group of friends scurrying to our next class and raced to catch up. I glanced back at his closed window, pondering Draco's actions, before turning back and walking to class.

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If you don't know, all the titles are from the original chapter and are just some of my favorite lines. Tell me your favorites in the comments!