OmnipotentDad
The story is good but I think it strayed or should I say the story becomes confusing because there is no harmony making me conduse what the plot is... Romance/love? VRMOO? Fantacy? And it was skipping the experiences of the MC how he got strong and lvl up, struggle of his guild... it just suddenly got strong and had many opponents... Sorry, no offence intended
The novel is not bad! I like how it summarized most of the important topics rather than a lengthy one. Don't judge my opinion too much though, lol. It is just tiring to read multiple chapters of explanation/background then the author will give us 1 to 2 chapters of the fighting/climax only 😫. Overall it is pretty decent for me
not being stingy on score but cant give a perfect one so that the author can be motivated. :) a good write it is. pacing of story accelerates then slows down bringing a thrill. plot maybe predicted but has twists and turns so it gives flavoring to it. by the way, do provide advance chapters for spirit stones. :) and open up for us to send gifts. ^_^
Writing Quality is good but I feel that you are a intermediate artist (solely based on this work) Stability is unknown as I just started reading it today. As such I will grade it as good. Story development is fair. It's moving a little fast but most stories in the initial stages do. The real question is if you can sustain the interest of the readers through the grinding phase of the novel. I rate it as fair because there isn't enough chapters to determine otherwise yet. Character design is fair. See above. World Background is decent. Details of his environment in the real world seemed seemed good but it felt really lacking in the world that he is probably going to spend more time in. 5star Excellent 4stae Good 3star Fair 2star Decent 1star Needs Improvement Thanks for your hard work and dedication to the art of literature. I hope you will continue in the future.
Seems weird to read the plot now. Why even mention his family? To readers, it's made to initially feel like he will get sent right before the bad stuff happens, so he can actually fix it, like every other novel like this. Nope. And there are a lot of issues, but I'm sadly used to it, since it is an original and a lot of people don't speak English as their first language, so I don't mind that.